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Sandy Beach...

SANDY BEACH...

Moisture outside,az the moisture Nside of Ur shower
Getz steamy~~Thoughts of putting on that LiL Bikini
Oiling up,looking more appetitizing then lunch~~Grabz R&B music
N this number "I wonder if he's ready 4 this knockout punch"
Sweeten without sugar~~ArrangeMENt set as the spaghetti stringz make Ur breast look fuller
SANDY BEACH...U reach
Ur destination~~He CUMMZ out with a smile & hello,a tight hug & lil converSATion~~9 p.m his thoughts on a SEXXXual relation
The top dropped,rain begins~~2 fall,off this lil trip U want 2 call, he grinz~~Ur driving while he kizzez U on Ur neck,cheeks & chin
He claim~~The rain came
At PURRRfect timing~~4 what'z N his mind,now U pull up B'tween the linez
SANDY BEACH...all over U,now he's whispering Ur hiz peach
He grabz the towelz~~Handz palmed on Ur AZZ have U moaning out lil vowels~~Towel laid down,down harder CUMMZ the rain Ur so caught up swiftly & don't kno' how~~He slowly taking U 2 the land of Paradise with his MENtal & SEXXXual kno'~~Of where 2 touch & how 2 go
Bout~~Bringing Ur freak out
SANDY BEACH...U taught him spots now he teach
What he learned pluz what he'z adding 2 get U so HOTT
Bi the rain U can't B kooled off~~Gentle kizzez az he touches Ur skin thats so soft
Off CUMMZ Ur top nipples harden like buttons~~He lickz B'tween Ur thighz Ur ready 2 loose body fluids all of a sudden~~Caressing Ur thighs,mouth over Urz moving downward 2 Ur nipples he'z sucking
Ur pores have open wide~~The more he teases the more U want him Nside
U nibble his ear~~Whispering 4 hiz wand 2 appear
Fully staffed~~U say "not here what if sum1 CUMMZ down this path"
Water glisten off the SANDY BEACH...4 play hiz science a climax already U have reached
He dug deep & kept going deeper,without removing Ur bottomz
Not even pulling them aside MENtally Ntuned~~U bloomed
Budded like flowers of June~~Tasting U,SEXXXual Ntercourse Ur craving 4 soon~~howling like a Wolf at a full moon
SANDY BEACH...U've been spotted,cuzz ur creamy spots continue 2 drop,az a finger slips pAZZ the polka dots
On Ur Bikini...2 continue would have U az the only appetitezer on a MENu,so Nstead of CUMMing 2 aHEAD MENtally U wuz strung thinking "what did he string me
Along"~~U climaxed numerouz timez without Ntercourse so Y doez it still feel wrong~~"how can I B so HOTT & he remain so strong
Not 2 rush N me,altho how he touch me is pure delight~~only out 4 a ride N my drop top & took a ride that made my night~~1 to alwayz remember,hiz name I whispered climaxing again U only need 2 kno' him az Mr. Do Right!


                                                      ~~MENtalseductionz
                                                                                      4-11-07

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  • bird-mad girl
    May 18, 2007

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    put your name in the author's notes or you will be DQed [you have two days to do this, starting now]

    for fuck's sake that was a pain in the ass to read. one suggestion, it wouldn't kill you to type words out instead using chat lingo. It makes your piece look more professional instead of chicken shit. Also, you should consider putting things in stanzas and shorten the lines to creat a flow.

    interesting piece though. thought it was hard as hell to read, I still managed.


  • Candy6
    April 27, 2007

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    This is only helpful suggestion. Try to make your sentences shorter then that if you do that it will look like the poet named walt whitman. Otherwise about the line your poem is okay. Keep on writing. I have faith in you.