Lingering within this garden,
Where gray broken teeth protrude,
Bodies melting under my feet,
My death I cannot elude.
The air is hot and damp,
I never thought it would end this way...
Lowered into the ground,
Oh despair, from death I cannot stray.
Drown my will to survive,
Break free the mirrors of my heart.
I'll watch them shatter here...
As my frigid mind falls apart.
In the end I am only ashes,
Flailing grains of sand,
Slipping helplessly through pale fingers,
Demise's cold hand.
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Love this!!!
Great poetic narrative & structure...
Found myself mouthing the words as I read.
Great piece!!!
Keep up the good work...
Well done!!!
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dang, this is a pretty good one. Death is the only escape from the pains of this world and you hae portrayed it quite nicely. Awesome poem!!!
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Holy Moly!!
Powerful Dark verse penned my Friend and what images
Oy!
Wish You only Happiness and though this is one intense write~
Beautifully penned!
Wow!!
Thank You for sharing this one
Many blessings to You!
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Very cheerful!
Now that you have written something so bright and cheery, you should write something dark and depressing. Frigid mind rather than fragile? I like it, but you know how I am.
Andy
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