Willows sway softly in a gentle breeze.
Leaves are dancing with out a care,
they're embraced in a dance,
love and passion flows in the air.
Peacefully flowing through the willow trees,
dancing with every chance.
Romance me,
embrace my fears,
set me free, take me away.
Sway freely in the love flying with ease.
Love we can both equally share,
dare to take just a glance,
to rid those terrors and despair,
and your cold icy heart you can unfreeze.
Let your love take that chance.
Dance and see,
the fading tears.
Love saves me from disarray.
Grey days are bright and clear, glowing above,
of shining hope embracing me with love.
A contest entry
- A Form Challenge by individuality.
1000 points, ended April 28, 2007, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
comments please
Comments
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the rhyme and count is correct, which is well done though as many seem to not get it right initially, however, i do think you are repeating yourself a little here, dance you used as a rhyme in the third line and then the sixteenth line, willow(s) twice in the first verse, love used often. just that with the repeating aspect really that caught my attention. that aside though, yes, an enjoyable poem.
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wonderful piece I loved
all of the images you have infused into this piece
Roses to you
Teresa
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