They call it twilight
Glimmering and golden on the wall
Catching on the shadows as it falls
I linger there
The rains remind me
How damp I used to feel this time of year
Saturated to the point I feared
My mind's intentions
They show me how it feels
They show me how it feels
Show me how it feels
To be alone
One day while walking
Walking down the street
I met a man
He had a gun
No I didn't see
No I didn't see it
No I didn't see
It
He showed me how it feels
He showed me how it feels
Showed me how it feels
To be alone
I long for
The Sunlight
I long for
The Sunlight
I long
For
The Sun
They call it twilight
Glimmering and golden on the wall
Catching on the shadows as it falls
I linger there
Author notes
Lyrics to my first blues-inspired piece...
A contest entry
- What does it mean to be ALONE? by WhenWillsCollide.
575 points, ended May 30, 2007, 60 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Searching For New Favourites ♥ by Immortal Obscurity.
1750 points, ended April 9, 2008, 51 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - One hour to give me all your prewrites!! by LeilaJayne.
1000 points, ended June 1, 2008, 69 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Beneath The Sky by Cynthia Gaines.
1000 points, ended April 5, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Congratulations on the shiny trophies!!
Thank you for your profound entry, as a blues song, this is great!! 
I'm wishing you all the best, and keep it flowing... 
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Wow... I love your repetition of the line, 'it shows me how it feels to be alone'. I felt the loneliness ripping at my heart as I read this... Well done!
Laura xxx
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Don't know if I said this yet (and if I didn't then I REALLY need to work on my manners...) but,
THANK YOU FOR THE HONORABLE WINNER TROPHY!
And thanks for putting together a great contest!
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Haha, no worries Anytime!
Laura x
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Pow!
I like this one aloooot. The beginning drawed me in. I also like the mystery about it. Very snazzy if i do say so myself. Spankyou very much.
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Well, spank you very much for reading! Snazziness, noted. I is happy to have you readed it.
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NO no no SPANK YOU. hahaha. Weelll your welcome in a snazzy way too. Have a bright sun shiny day!
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WOW
What to say... what to say... I simply do not believe words could do this write any justice. The style is AMAZING!!! This is definitely one of the best poems I've come across in a long time. I look forwrd to reading more of your work. :-)
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Thank you so much! It means a lot to hear feedback like that. I'm smiling right now. I put a lot of myself into my work and it's so awesome when it comes through to others... I'll be checking out some of your stuff, too!
Thanks, friend!
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this is truely the poem taht I strive to read! I enjoyed the introduction to this poem. It had a nice point and was kind of metaphoric. I also like how it is realated to being alone and then the repetitveness of some places really streghtend the emotion of hte poem.
the flow of this poem was really affective and really made the piece... gave it attitude?? HUMOR ME!
and yes, I do agree that this is a work in progress becasue you could do so much wiht the ending if you put more work into it. this is a very nice start of a very nice poem you have here.
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How funny you should choose the word attitude... it's turned into a kind of blues on my guitar and the vocal line in the chorus is very strong and loud. Thank you for your kind words and thank you for creating a contest where my little work fits...
An afterthought - wondering if I should post my metaphorical intentions on this piece... or maybe they're obvious. It's so hard to read your own writing objectively...
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