As I'm gasping for breath and holding on for dear life,
I turn to my friends, kids, and to my wife.
I ponder a thought of what my last words should be.
What is the phrase they want uttered from me?
Is it something of substance, or merely a joke?
Hurry up Pat, you're starting to choke!
I tell my friend to sit still, and try to relax
I forgot where I was, so I retraced my tracks
Ah! There it is, I started to see.
My thoughts were flowing, and my soul was just about free
These are my last words, so take them to heart.
Although they may not be important or smart.
Life can be fulfilling, and life can be fun
But Life is a bitch, if you marry one.
Author notes
haha just more of a joke: i don't have a wife. I'm only 16
A contest entry
- Last words... by Nitenovanavium.
1000 points, ended May 2, 2007, 20 entries
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Comments
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ouch, 'traumatic' irony!... i like it ^_^
i have to use a line like that on my death bed!
your poem was written expertly, and i liked the rhyme scheme. it was well put together and you dont have any silly little mistakes either (the bane of my existence!) you also have a good sence of syllable to syllable rhythem which makes the poem easy to read and flow...
well done, and good luck
yours
mike -
wow i really liked this one the whole thing was great my favorite part was when you said "life is a bitch, if you marry one" but is that insinuating that you don't like your wife......anyways it is a really good write
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