Time hasn't eroded the memories away:
The feel of your lips against mine,
Your hair on my shoulder,
Your forehead against my throat,
Your arms wrapped about me
Enfolding me in sweetness and warmth and security.
Time hasn't bleached out my feelings,
They linger with all their former strength.
No sacrifice is too great
To hear another tender word from you.
Your voice echoes in my heart.
Time hasn't chipped away at this passion,
Making it lame and pathetic.
It is the crutch that sustains me,
It keeps me alive with purpose,
It is the undying flame that burns behind my eyes,
And everything upon which I gaze since having seen you
Is more beautiful, and resplendent with grace.
Time hasn't evaporated me,
I have not slipped into a gaseous state
To be ignored, discarded, denied, abandoned.
I rail against the loneliness
That lays upon me like a film,
The decay of amnesiac limbs and ligaments.
I drink bitter wine from a cracked goblet
And wonder if this is what it was like to kiss you.
The comatose rationality that insists
That I don't love you, no, don't love you, no, can't possibly love you
Fades into a dark, blissful void,
Never to return,
Like you.
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Written July 21st, 2003
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Outstanding!!
Enfolding a most gorgeous story...
Thanks for sharing...
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This is a beautiful piece of writing. I have not much else to say but this is beautiful. If I could comment or critique I would but instead you just get my applause, which hopefully should satisfy.
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This was a wonderfully written piece. You truly let your emotion out slowly and really suck the reader in. This is sweet and very intense. I really liked it It truly is a masterpiece. Keep it up hun....and hey stop ignoring me..weenie!!! LOL
~Laurie
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Wow so much emotion.. so much detail i realy like this part "Time hasn't bleached out my feelings,
They linger with all their former strength.
No sacrifice is too great
To hear another tender word from you.
Your voice echoes in my heart" it realy speaks to me.. brings back memories.. tears
i like this one alot! good write.
~Ash~
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whoa this is one great piece. beautifully done with lots of honest emotion. Loved this part..spoke to my soul
"Time hasn't bleached out my feelings,
They linger with all their former strength.
No sacrifice is too great
To hear another tender word from you.
Your voice echoes in my heart."
I have to tell you the end really kicks ya as well. powerfully done -
wow. i liked this alot, to me it is very well layed out, not giving everything away straight away, subtaly telling a story. i like the way u worded the idea of the fading memory of his kiss:
"I drink bitter wine from a cracked goblet
And wonder if this is what it was like to kiss you" keep on writting, i look forward to reading more. a good poem makes the reader feel... and u definately succeeded in making me, as the reader, feel. thank you.
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