I say I love you - to those who deserve the depth of my emotions,
I say I forgive - to those who have done me wrong and asked for forgiveness,
I say I learned - to those who taught me how to read, write and spell,
I say I wish - to those who never knew me, that I wanted my life to be shorter so as to defy the length of my tragedy,
I say you were too late - to those who ignored my pleas for help, love and advice when none came,
I say you never returned my gifts - for I gave much to my friends and my family, not just presents for special occasions, but I also gave of my soul, my heart and my very being and you stamped on my feelings without a care,
I say I care no more - for this life, for my life or any more for anyone else's who gave nothing back in return when I really needed it.
Author notes
I am standing on the side of a bridge - I am terminally ill with cancer and choose not to fight it because life didn't do me any favours so I'm not returning any.
I just typed up what I felt on the spur of the moment. It's nothing special, but it could be my best work yet. I don't know. I am just so confused right now.
A contest entry
- Last words... by Nitenovanavium.
1000 points, ended May 2, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wonderful
nice emotional piece. easy to read and everyone can understand where you are coming from because we all have had those feelings..
Patrick
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Wow, you have been on this site for a long time. During times of despair and in cases like this where one does a lot of reflecting, it is easy to see that one could think like this - a great time for writing as well, as all those feelings are released and we get it off our chest and feel a bit better somehow, if one can feel better in times like this. Lots of regrets and a some feeling sorry for oneself too can be found in these lines. You have taken us into the mind of someone suffering from cancer and what they might be feeling at this time. Well done.
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This is a grand piece of poetry and very much enjoyed
by this reader.
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Wonderful
Very very beautiful writing and so deep too. Really deep emotions that play on the mind of the reader. Keep writing.
Wayne
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Many Thanks
Wayne,
Thank you so much for your comment and your applause. I really appreciate it.
This is the most recent thing I have written. I saw the contest and wanted to enter. I just wrote what I was feeling at the time. I was deeply confused and unhappy at the time. I hope I conveyed that throughout the poem.
Thanks again.
Shauna.
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wow, this was deeply moving, cancer is a horrible thing, it makes people accept death way before their time to simply ease some pain. i know the inner details of how that feels... even though i only experianced it second hand.
this poem touched me more than most others and i pray that your confusion fades in time.
if this poem was made to a literal extent and you are experiancing cancer, i send my deepest love.
and if not, you are one brilliantly talented writer moreso than i will ver be (which applies to the visa versa anyway)
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No, I am not suffering from cancer. It was one of the stipulations of the contest I entered that we say what is on our minds if we only had 2 minutes to live. We were to state to the person who initiated the contest if we were dying, and if so, what was it i.e. something sudden. I chose something that affects a lot of people in everyday life, as it is so sad.
Yes, I am confused right now and these words are what flowed from me when I was inspired to write once again upon seeing the title of the contest. I did not mention God as I am no longer religious. Religion means little, or nothing, to me.
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fair say, well then you are a very brilliant writer, and its paid off in this competition so far...
and yea, religeon scares me now... too many bad things have happned that i cannot explian
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