There's no way back anymore
the needle is going to go through
i will get to close my eyes
and never open them never again
I'm sorry darling, i cant take it anymore
its the weight of it all, the everyday pain
i might get to reincarnate, I hope not
so i can rest forever, and be free of it all
I know this is being selfish
but god closed me the doors to heaven
stars wont shine in my sky anymore
i can barely breathe, i cant even think.
I've been thinking a lot about this
how to finish the suffering for once
air in my veins will do it, its effective
say bye for me to the kids, i love you.
A contest entry
- Last words... by Nitenovanavium.
1000 points, ended May 2, 2007, 20 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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this is really sad sooo powerfull it was very well done it had a really nice flow to it..I believe this is a great enterance for this contest best of luck to you and keep it up..you are very talented
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i like it. its realy good. but i dont understand what drug you are using in a needle. i know it sounds stupid but i realy dont know. mabey i do and just cant think of it. but any way realy good.
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thanks for the comment!
oh no drugs needed.. injecting AIR in the veins is still letal =]
"air in my veins will do it, its effective"
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wow, great write, i dont think i expected this calibur of work to be on my contest...
im awe struck, this was amazing...
i loved how you made the last line so subtle and yet so powerful.
a magnificently mastercrafted masterpiece...
(try saying that 10 times really fast, lol)
Yours truley
mike
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ha ha.. i cant even say that once!
(i hate my english.. i wish it were my native lenguage..)
im soo glad you enjoyed this..
i dont mean to seem cocky, but i think my suicidal poems shine more than my other poems x]
i was kinda dissapointed, since i've got another suicide poem which is way better (as far as im concerned, and i didnt think this was good enough.
i find the poem great, but some people wont be able to feel what i felt while i was writting it, it seems you did =]
good luck with the contest!
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