Hiden away are her emotions
locked behind the mask she wears
her eyes give no hint to the pain and fear
but if you look close you can see she's holding it in
shadowed eyes
tired eyes
guarded eyes
they look out but they don't see
because she's pushed the world away
Author notes
Im not sure if this is what your looking for but I tried. It was option # 1 the picture one.
A contest entry
- I wan't to get lost in your eyes by shattered logic.
440 points, ended May 13, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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well done, this is what i was looking for, the flow is nice and the word choice is also nice.
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her eyes give no hint to the pain and fear
but if you look close you can see she's holding it in
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These are very powerful lines, and my favorite.
It shows someone trying so hard to hide whats inside them, but leaves enough so someone can really find her, showing she wants to be saved, but she cant do it.( that what i see anyways)
Good job and good luck!!!
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they say the eyes or the windows to the soul, you expressed that well in this, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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Hey, can I just get the option number you picked please and thanks!!!
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