Dig my rose pink painted toes
Into rapid cooling sand
While your fingers laced to mine
Like a bow inside your hand
And I lightly touch my lips
Upon your 'lucent velvet cheek
Whilst my ears fill up with music
Of your breath so warm and sweet
I feel so small and fragile
When I listen to the roar
Sat by vast expanse of ocean
As it struggles on the shore
But your hair about my shoulders
Seems so sooth each crashing wave
And our eyes sink into sunset
As night emerges from the day
My love is like its blazes
Stretched out towards the sky
Burning every colour
Like it cannot say goodbye
Without showing just how powerfully
Lustrous it can be
Merge orange/gold like you/I
Before sleeping in the sea
The sea I once was lost in
Forever gone to roam
Til you swam out and saved me
Held my hand and brought me home
My love is like the evening sun
Though never will it set
I'll keep on burning brightly
For as long as you will let
And when my sunshine's finally beaten
You'll see the stars so brightly shone
And I'll be the brightest burning there
For you to wish upon ♥
Author notes
Inspired by a sunset picture with the little boat =]
About/for my now ex, though I was still with him when I wrote it obv.
A contest entry
- MY AP girl by Captain Emo.
300 points, ended May 1, 2007, 18 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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omg!!! this poem is magickal!!! wish I could write as beautifully as this, welldone
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awwwwwwwwww this is a sweet poem. i really like it. Nice work
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awww this is so cute. To me also this read well as a song. It's really sweet, I like the start, it really unique
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Wow amazing write! I loved the imagery and flow of the poem.... plus the title is pretty sicknasty if i do say so myself
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Wowie, I love this. I need someone to swim out and save me :[ Your descriptions are perfection doll. Wonderful poem and congrats on the gold.
*Stephanie*
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awesomeness thats all that need be said
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awwww. this is gorgeous.
love it very well done! and i love your rhyme, it doesnt sound forced! great 
lol
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Oceans/beaches are my favorites... I really loved your poem. It was pretty and romantic, but not overdone at all. The imagery and the metaphors were lovely, very convincing (in my opinion, at least). I really like the whole theme. It was all really good. *awed*
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wow. you did it. this is your amazing love poem. this was stunning. :-) i can't choose a favourite part, its brilliant. i did love the title. best luck in the contest. :-)
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I love this.
I've never been to a beach before
And this kinda gave me that feeling
And the looooooveee.
WOW! I'm jealous of your poetry skittles.
hehe.
Love ya,
[[ZombiNa]] ♥
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