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Beyond belief



i spit knives at you

yet still

you love me



In a list

A contest entry

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  • leo2
    May 3, 2007

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    To me it is very believable. I've known a few people personally that were in such a situation. Congratulations on the trophy.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long


  • fungshuay24
    April 28, 2007

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    wow, this is oddly intriguing to me. i don't know why but it makes me want to know the story behind it. you did good with this momma. i miss ya!

  • Bad Bill
    April 27, 2007

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    Excellent short piece, Jan. It may seem perverse to love someone who persistently hurts you, but sometimes human nature IS perverse. Perceptive little poem, which well deserved silver.

    Bill


  • capricornpoet
    April 26, 2007
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    dart out of way

    Satire with seeming whimsy as knifes dart out, one must duck..


  • individuality gold member
    April 26, 2007

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    people like feeling pain i reckon, seems that way to me, love, pain, they're constantly at the disco together


  • Floorboards
    April 26, 2007

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    good poem

    great metaphor, strong poem, thank you very much for entering my contest and good luck to you,
    floorboards.

  • Tearfueledpen
    April 26, 2007

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    It sounds believable and within the realms of modern realms of modern reality. People always want someone that plays hard to get, or that hurts them.

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