You capture me
in hungry eyes
that burn with savage fire
you stroke my skin
with ardent lips
till the sheets flame from desire
Without reserve
I moan and writhe
as you penetrate my soul
I worry that
your heart is like
your eyes, as black as coal
Your silver tongue
and nimble lips
suckle at my breast
Are you some devil
in disguise?
My heart stops in my chest
Limber fingers
lift my hips
I’m weak and you are strong
Thrusting deep
you open me
this rhythm is our song
Gasping voices
echoed breaths
cries of building rapture
Tortured bodies
enslaved by
the bliss we seek to capture
Tumbling; falling
soaking wet
puddles douse the blazing bed
You whisper love
hearts beat
“I need you, you’re my bread”
Patricia Gibson-Little
Author notes
This is what sitrs my soul... My bread... My life... My Love.
Patti
Written July 21st, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- ~*~Stir The Soul~*~ by Darianna.
250 points, ended August 3, 2003, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I loved this flow...totally suited the subject written about!! I can see why this would stir your soul...grins wickedly...sex with the one you love is the most beautiful experience ever!!! So passionate, so honest, and so fulfilling!! You made my heart drum in my chest, as you painted this picture...reminded me of my beloved Glen...grins...thankyou for entering my contest...good luck!! Hugs for you!!! Darianna x
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I love this poem. It makes the sex seem so passionate!! Good write.
Edited on Sep 21, 10:38 p.m. because 'misunderstanding'. -
Sensual
This is so beautiful and intense!! I love the way the images built up a powerful ending and how I felt the passion of the poem. Excellent write!!! -
this was a good write i love it keep it up ill be back to look for more thanks for sharing with us your great work i hope to see a few comments from you soon keep it up and comin love your work
rock on
~Hannah~
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Wow..this made me feel a tad voyeuristic. Very hot and steamy!! I loved the flow and the rhyme scheme you used here...they accentuated your words and seemed to make them build in intensity as you read along. Job VERY well done!
Naena
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well they wanted imagery! erm yep plenty of that here!
They wanted emotion! well buckets of that too!
O love this poem its really really good, flows well and sets off a little flame, turns it into an inferno and then whoosh all gone.....
really good. I love it. great write. -
I do believe you accomplished what you were trying to achieve:)
Reenie
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i think the ending is ok hun. no worries. Good job indeed
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