Wind
in blew
red leaves hue
abandon quelled
feathered in gutters view
rustled its leaf down the street spelled,
up towards the sky ; landed as it felled
airy, chased by magic ambience, whimsical, jelled
presence, unflawed sewage, rain grit, defined
mud, feathered lint, all the trash meld
global, natures compelled
beauty, askewed
shape, withheld
handheld
Blind
Author notes
the diatelle is as follows: 1/2/3/4/6/8/10/12/10/8/6/4/3/2/1, but unlike an ethere, has a set rhyme
pattern of abbcbccaccbcbba
In a list
A contest entry
- Diatelle Form by Samplette.
450 points, ended May 3, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow and well done with this pattern
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This poem is outstanding. It is a beautiful form and the words and images are visually unique. I like how the words twine around images as the form of the poem is also spiral. Great poem!
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an enhanced beauty, all it's own... Wonderful!
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I really like this. I love shape poems. It's very interesting and I can really get a picture in my mind when I read this
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Thank u
I'm so moved to that u read my diatelle. First one done here. Thank u for the gracious comment. Kendhal22
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A great ciqruian.
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very nice. i like maple tree.
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Thank you
I'm glad you liked my poem. Thank you for commenting. Kendhal22
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A very nice diatelle here and wonderful imagery instilled with this. I do prefer the more poetic writing out of numbers, but can also see that, in this case, it would mess up the formation that looks beter in a diatelle like this. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors.
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Thank you
I'm glad you liked my poem. I knew if I would wrote out the number it would have thrown the poem in a new direction, which I think would messed the flow of the diatelle syllable count. Thank you for the gracious comment. Kendhal22
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This is a nice piece. The first, eighth and last line are supposed to rhyme. The 180 breaks the syllable count for that line...some other lines are correct in meter as well. Still I enjoyed the read. Thank you for entering.
Sa
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wonderful diatelle, I havnt done on of those yet, i tryed a ethere but I just couldnt get the handle on it. great write good luck in the contest.
John
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Diatelle is definitely a different form. I like it. Never seen something like this and the imagery you produced in this write is geniune and sincere. It goes nicely with the picture that you used. All in all, lovely write. Keep up the good work.
Love always,
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this is interesting. altogether a powerful poem. i like the way you structured it as well. the rhyme scheme and the words you chose altogether are amazing. i am astounded. keep up the amazing writing, it's truly eye opening.
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Thank you
Wow! a response so soon, I'm shocked or moreless stunned. Thank you for the niciest comment on my poem. Kendhal22
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really great! you have this piece nailed from word 1...thanks for sharing. Keep up the awesome work. peace and light always in all ways, Kendal
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Wow!
I didn't expect answer to my poem. Thank for wonderful critique geven here. Kendhal22
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