A confounding call from a secluded expanse
Keeps echoing, the vision is so vague
The Abyss and Eden show me a glimpse
In the darkness of the frightening night
The comforting smile of the Seraph
The gruesome laughter of the Satan
The bemused soul is truly unaware
To wherein it really belongs
A shadow floats sniveling above
Concealed by a layer of miasma
The clouds produce spiky drops
Each of the drops penetrates the soul
The twinge makes the soul realize
With each of the rain the haze uncovers
An eternal journey has just began
To an entirely eccentric world
Nearing the death day by day
Nearing new life day by day
Uncovering the enigma of death after life
Uncovering the enigma of life after death
The soul experiences a slow death
The soul regains a new life…
Author notes
Option 2 picture inspired: Death
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Comments
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quite dark indeed!
shows how you think an existence deals with death - and describes the picture well.
great job and good luck! -
Judges Opinion
WELL pretty imagery... Sigh, you have created and beautiful and philisophical write, which many of us want but often can not achieve. Although you lost balance in the stanza size you have resureccted it with the negative/positive energy throughout. EXAMPLE: seraph and satan. The opening lines catch the audience which is excellent, although the title is CLICHE the poem proved that you shoudlnt judge a book by it's cover.
Thank you and Best of Luck -
this is a good poem but it seems really forced like you tried to hard to add big words.
but its not bad i like it
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