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~*Last day*~

on the last day i tried to make it alright

it was too much to ask, too much to surpass
the feelings in the abyss, contorted with rage that bended

i pretended to hold it in and in the end
i pushed it out of my unhallowed darkness
down on me poured the rain, crimson rain of shame

it seems i tried to make it alright

and in the end, i gave up the will to fight
i was enslaved by the depth of hurt within
God, forgotten his fallen angel

help me please. wont you lord?
i served from the day i was born
the evil seed of me manifested into light
i was called forth in necromantic seminars,
and still i tried to be the one
the one to survive
and now im the one who has to shift with fright
my figure slithers patiently waiting
a facade of shimmering light

and i tried to make it all right

i locked the doors, pulled myself with in
then did it again
till i was wraped tight in the warmth of snow
i swept my carcas into the cool infernal
who knew it wouldnt burn me
who knew it wouldnt turn my grotesque beauty into ash
who knew the derelict cadaver containing my essence
was a glutton intoxicated with the attempt to

to makes things alright, i tried

on that last day, i tried
but garbage was the stuff my mortality was made of
and my innocense was denied
the flowers surrounding the pagoda of my soul
were trampeled and stolen

a sad far well, a morose end

Author notes

pagoda:an Asian temple;
Innocense: a type of flower
morose: showing a brooding ill humor

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  • whipped rose
    April 26, 2007

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    Judges Opinion

    The story line is well though out, maybe a little jumpy but mostly very well done. The use of the word light even though it is apparent of the all surrounding darkness is very creative i think, it creates conflict and makes the reader understand even clearer that "i tried to make it right" is the essential theme. Flow is good and imager is also good
    Thanks and best of Luck