it's not just the sound
of coffee being pored
the grinding of dark beans
expresso spluttering -
it's the atmosphere of the place
soft music playing
over murmur of low voices
steady stream of new customers
with their to go paper containers -
as well, those who visit at tables
aroma of gourmet flavors
that french vanilla
to open nostrils
hazlenut -
gets saliva glands working
an art to drinking coffee
enjoyment of a cup
no matter shape or colour
content that's important -
conversation too
Author notes
picture by Matteo Avanzini (making coffee) from cafexperiment.com
A contest entry
- A Spot by ea.
500 points, ended April 27, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - biggest contest in allpoetry history! (i hope) need 1,000 entries!! by Gasp.
1300 points, ended July 11, 2007, 638 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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Excellant
Very well written, indeed. Reminds me of one, a friend of mine, and I wrote many years ago:
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I've already commented on this terrific poem but I'm glad I revisited it. It was just as delightful to read the second time as it was the first time. Great vivid imagery. Write On!
Dennis -
Your excellent imagery creates the perfect coffee house ambiance. I could smell it, taste it, hear the background noises. Very sensory pleasing piece!
~Lori
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Granny, I can smell the dark roast aroma in my nostrils. You have captured the full bodied essence of the refreshing cup. Sorry my friend I will just have to go and put the kettle on. Well done. Val
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I know I commented on this already, but I couldn't help but reading this delightful piece again! Makes me really want to go to s coffee show and have a nice cup of coffee! Wonderful!! -
I'm not a coffee drinker, but you capture the essence of those who enjoy the hot drink and it's many flavors. Vivid descriptives of the sight, sounds and smells that come from a coffee shop. Well crafted and a much enjoyed read.
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I am so going to get some expresso, coffee or something hot! THis smelled delicious as well as made my mouth water... The aroma!
Thanks for sharing and best wishes,
Frogz~
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It felt like I was there with you as I read this wonderfully descriptive poem, I could smell the freshly ground beans and the aroma of the flavored coffees. This one is wonderfully crafted and well appreciated, Thanks for sharing the experience.
Dennis
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Well, as a tea drinker myself, I wondered what I'd make of this poem but hey, you did it! You got me going ... (no mean feat!) and salivating at the thought of that "french vanilla" ... oh yeah! So, it worked! Good write XX
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hee hee
This was well penned and quite cute.
I liked the line
"an art to drinking coffee
enjoyment of a cup"
Of course there is also an art to taking $5 a cup out of your pocket and making you think it's a good deal for you!
I enjoyed this. God bless you, Mark
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Excellent! I love coffee and this poem really said it so well. Superb imagery and smellagery.
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I LOVE being in a coffee house! The smells are absolutely wonderful!! I'm a coffee-holic I must confess.. One of my most favored things to do is get a good cup of coffee and go sit outside in my backyard... I have a little table out there and I find it just so peaceful and relaxing!
This is wonderful writing!!! I've missed all my 'circle of friends' poets!
~Melissa
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MMMMmmmmmm....God, how I love coffee!
This poem is a pure delight to read
on a beautiful sunny Saturday morning
Thank you so much for reading my poetry,
too Love, Lane
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BRAVO!!!!!
LO-AMO I love coffee but cannot drink it, so going to a cafe and being in the envirement inhaling the aroma is metophorichely rich for me. Reading this wonderfull write made me remminice to a #1 caf I have just encountered, and will continue to indulge in, because Let me tell you they have a lot more than coffee going on!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! CHIN-CHIC SALUTE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! -
You did a wonderful poem on the coffee cup theme! You can feel the coffee house and the atmosphere surrounding it very well.
soft music playing
over murmur of low voices
steady stream of new customers
with their to go paper containers -
as well, those who visit at tables
That is it! Luckily I'm at work, and not somewhere nice like your poem. I would never get to work! Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem!
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Delightful!
Ah! I love coffee! Drinking it, making it, smelling it, visiting while drinking it...Everything about it!! You've penned a very delightful poem here about coffee and the delight some of us find in it! Great job!!!
Now if I could just find my expresso....
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Wow!
I don't even drink
but You sure enticed me to try
Beautifully penned and Love the images!
Thank You for sharing this flavor to satiate
the taste buds
Best wishes to You in the contest!
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Well that certainly hits the spot! I myself love coffee and this verse you have penned here is delightful. The image is great! You made me smell and taste it. Well done!
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Good ambiance and I like that you focused on the aspect of conversation as these two little cups look like lovebirds, snuggling up to share a secret this morning. I also like how the word content seems to have a double meaning here. I didn't really notice this picture -- what a cute one! Thanks for bringing it to my attention by entering the Xperiment.
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rich
i personally love poems about coffee. This one captures the ambience of a coffee shop nicely; i can just smell the rich aromas now.
One line i had a question about was the last line of the stanza
"soft music playing
over murmur of low voices
steady stream of new customers
with their to go paper containers -
those who visit at tables"
I wasn't sure if you were reffering to the same group of people in the 3rd line, or if these were different. You might consider losing the hyphen and replace it with either a comma followed by an "and," or a semicolon and adding another line. Regardless, you may just want to look at that.
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Ah Java...the must have morning pick me up. But the conversation and hustle bustle surrounding it in your local coffee shops is a wonderful thing to encounter as well. One can learn alot about another over a cup of coffee. Smooth write here very enjoyable to read as is all of your pieces
Becky
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I am sitting with you in this coffee house enjoying the sights, smells and conversation. One of the reasons we are willing to pay so much for a gourmet cup of coffee is the total experience of the senses. Well written. Peace. Liz
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