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(o, martiana), parts one and two

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                                  am a constellation-

                                                                  raw blood, copper

                                        spots, yellow lines
                                    two seconds    smeared    across an eastern sky
                                to shimmer & waste
                                                  and

                            boldly go  where only dead have gone before

                               

                                    and only dead would go after.



                      we, of lines,    of
                                        lineage before us


                            of those with cold eyes,  cold hearts
                                          cold bones

                                                      in cold fingers.


                            o, martiana
                                  you of blood flags and hollow eyes
                                you and you  of horrorstory hands
                                        and rust for hair

                                                -( a      sea) of rust for hair

                                a sea of rust and fingers,    bones
                                      the curve of moving fingers of the blind

                                and the gaping maw of inexplicable.


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                        am,
                            am or was







                                  the wind that drives
                                                the red cells

                                      to the veins

                                  to smear the skies often called    'chrystalline'


                                    smear them from the eyes of the faraway gods


                                          and catapult them into the night of the blinded.


          two years,    two seconds,    two months,    two days


                                                      and fourty-eight hundred aeons
                                press across the eastern sky





                            o, martiana,

                                you of faded night and

                                            coughing dusk;

                                you that drew the expanse
                          of death
                                    and life
                          and death again


                your song is ringing across the writhing plains

                                              ringing,
                                                      and fading




                        and soon
                        not even the gods will be there

                                    to discern it



                                                          or you.

Author notes

had a picture of romantic-era ode,
except written to a ghostly wasteland.

voila.
pretty apt reflection of our state of mind nowadays.

please critique it to death- first writing since december.

please tear the damn thing apart.

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  • can
    July 4, 2007
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    ...and if i stopped burning, would you know in your lifetime?