Am I really missing them,
or am I really insane?
When it comes to depression
there's no knowledge.......or gain.
Walls become mirrors;
people, shadows of one's soul,
One's perception of living~
intuition........all that's known.
..........Stranded.....
infected by the unnatural
familiarity plots thoughts of my children
a fancying of togetherness that trinkles.
Doors open..... a hallway lingers
dark sidewalk to the universe,
What does this all mean?
what destiny lies....... in this purpose?
moist drainage
argues
with blue eyes,
comprimising with forgotten;
failing to agree.
pounding drums echoe
within,
rhythmically beating...
lying that there's
life~
an existence of air.
damp and hollow,
emotions of
a once percieved
healthy beat,
now..... slow thumps
of exhaustion.
thanks for reading
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exhaustion...
I was peeking back at some of your earlier work and found this gem. I suffer from depression and this one hit a little too close to home for comfort. You have described a lot of the feelings of hopelessness and how the walls become mirrors. My favourite passage is
"moist drainage
argues
with blue eyes"
Take care... and keep those blue eyes dry!
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Excellente'
Your Writing Is Very Good. I Liked The Poem, Very Much, Just Sorry To Hear The 'Sad Parts', Indeed...Yes, 'Depression Reaps Many Of Our-Souls', And We Cannot' Let it Win Over!! Triumph' Is The Word'!!! Victory Is In The Poem......Liked It Much!!! 'God Bless You'..Love, Shirley ann shaw-raytown,mo....................................
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This is impressive. You have taken the cycle of life, the turmoil and confusion and put it into words that allow one to feel the intensity of this piece. Love the second stanza...actually loved them all as i could so relate to each one..but the second hit a chord. WEll done...thank you for sharing..may your ink ever keep flowing.
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hey thanks. hey, i think you are right about sending that message the other day, but i added you to my favorites for a reason, so it might be from coming across your writes at some point and clicking on your work. did u ever go by any other names? just wondering. anyways, thanks for reading a few of my poems. i really havent been able to truly write in a while between work my mind going blank, i guess thats a good thing though. i dont know. anyways, sorry for rambling.
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excellent
very intriguing indeed. Question yourself enough and soon, you find that it's like questioning a rubix cube. Or possibly a conundrum. Either way, sadness, uncertainty, and frustration are all part of any person-of-depth's journey within.
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wow, that is a powerful write. its reallyintriguing to read and the bit about mirrors hooked me!! LOL. you are a genius!!!
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thanks lexy
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Excellent
I liked this one Dawn. It is rather dark and down, but it shows the sheer frustration and anxiety of your situation, and your fear/hope of the future. Anyone who knows you deeply understands. As per you're first lines, no, you're not insane. You're missing them with acute emptiness and grief. That is a real human expression of feeling.
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Sadness lingers within each line, confusion, loss and sadness, tugging at the heart of the reader...me! I know this lives within you daily and I could not imagine my life in your shoes, I can only add you in my prayers and wishes. You are a pleasure to read
~Tia
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Your destiny will occur when you are able to forgive yourself Wind~ All the things that you have endured are wrapped in pain. Once you can unwrap your torment, love will find a way...they will find you. Hard to believe in at this time...but one day, it will happen you have to live and dream of that colored rainbow...love ~Sie
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hey, thanks sie
how are you tonight?
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