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[i.t.'s. o.v.e.r.]

Pain, emptiness.
I'm incomplete and obsolete.
The void just can't be filled.
Broken hearted, crest fallen countenance.
Lost, forlorn, and hopeless.
Melancholy misery-save me from myself!

Disconsolate dreams on dreary days
Fill my head with thoughts of life.
Life-a sugar coated waste of breath
For people like myself who give in,
Who give up; we're not fighters.
When things get tough, we grab a knife
To bleed away the pain we can't escape.
To drink away the problems we can't ignore.
To forget the unspoken bonds
Of that life-long contract.

At times it seems easy
To just say goodbye.
We dream of all the details,
plan our every move.
But when the time comes,
Fear overpowers determination.
What am I giving up?
Not much, but it's everything I have.

Apathy and indifference.
What does it matter?
Once I'm gone...a few tears might be shed.
Here and there, on the faces of those
Who only pretend to care.
But I will no longer suffer-
Suffer the desolate devastation
That is my world.

Author notes

I'M NOT DEPRESSED OR SUICIDAL! It's just a poem that I wrote to express the feelings of people I pain for, that are lost in a world they can't escape.

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  • whispersinthedark
    June 21, 2008
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    "For people like myself who give in,
    Who give up; we're not fighters.
    When things get tough, we grab a knife
    To bleed away the pain we can't escape.
    To drink away the problems we can't ignore."

    WOW...just wow.
    incredible.


  • Valdar Cuebiyari
    April 25, 2007

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    Well done

    "Disconsolate dreams on dreary days
    Fill my head with thoughts of life.
    Life-a sugar coated waste of breath
    For people like myself who give in.....

    At times it seems easy
    To just say goodbye.
    We dream of all the details,
    plan our every move.
    But when the time comes,
    Fear overpowers determination.
    What am I giving up?
    Not much, but it's everything I have....."

    Generally I don't enjoy the self-destructive poems like this, but I loved this one! It was very moving and insightful without becoming too emo. Very good job! I think I'm going to bookmark it. My absolute favorite lines are "Life-a sugar coated waste of breath" and "Fear overpowers determination.
    What am I giving up?
    Not much, but it's everything I have."


    • write2breathe
      April 26, 2007
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      Thanks!

      Thanks for commenting and bookmarking! This isn't completely true, and I've never been self-destructive or suicidal. I'm generally a happy person, but when I get emotional...this is what comes out.