♥Torn♥
[[Alone]]
*Unknowing*
//Just plain broken\\
~><~
((I just can't go on))
[[There is nothing to life for]]
~~No one can save me from me~~
♥Behind baby blue eyes♥
~><~
**Hold me tightly**
As I die
♥In Your♥
*((Arms))*
A contest entry
- *~ Poetry Formed V ~* by Arkbear.
400 points, ended April 26, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Uncommon Entry ~
2nd line...2nd stanza is grammatically incorrect ~
All the punctuations and marks remove the
aesthetic eye appeal from this Arkquain ~
I thank you for entering, but
3.2 pts deducted for these errors ~
Perfect syllable count, yet message is a little bit too common ~
Thanks for trying out the new Arkquain ~
Bear ~
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Check your syllable count as well as ( 7 ) syllable lines please ~
If you need to, go back and read the rules ~
SMILE!
Bear ~ -
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Fixed it! (i think...wait...*counts sylables* YUP!)
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Hm? OHHHH OK I think I see my mistake....Sorry! -_- *me being embarrased*
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Thank you for this entry ~
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