theres nothing more frightening
then your first time...
first time alone...
first time without...
first time apart...
from someone close to your heart.
as much as it hurts inside...
we have to move on although we have cried
because nothing anyone can say or do
will bring that someone back to you
so take a leap of faith,
dont let your love go to waste
youll find someone tho it may take time
look inside and you will find
that although theres nothing more frightening then your first time...
first time alone...
first time without...
first time apart...
from someone close to your heart.
theres someone waiting for you
around the corner or maybe a few
you will find that someone
who makes you feel like brand new
someone who cares about you
more then that someone who used to
just look inside you and be strong
and wait for a love that will do you no wrong
Author notes
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A contest entry
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this is really good.
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wow i really like this pome its perfect and really true i thnink when you are in love with someone you are blinded to whats going on like you dont want to know that truth of it and when it finally ends you are still blinded by that person and it takes a long time to start to see again but i think that everyone is perfect... they just have to find the right person to bring out the perfection in them. great write thank you for entering my contest.
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good fuccin job
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lovely write the words flow with ease and great imagery just need you to put your user name in your authors notes...
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i have put my username in my poem notes x thanku for your comment
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This is a very well written piece, especially considering the time frame, however i did notice a gramatical error (srry im an english major ^^)
you wrote "makes you feel like brand new" remove the like and it will not only be gramatically correct but flow better (in my opinion)
you captured the emotion of this poem very well and it is an emotion that everyone can relate to, wether already or in the future. -
Beautiful write..
Its really very good..I like it alot.
I know that feeling only too well..
thanks for sharing..
Peace
~M~
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NICE
I remember that first time with out that someone and it is true, you'll find someone better who would make you feel brand new.
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