repeated actions.
under the stairs.
dark deppression
there is no light there.
trapped and lonely
at just seventeen.
my sisters faces are twisted in two.
one when she smiles at the stars and the moon.
the fire within her shines so bright tonight
as i hold her hand she smiles in delight.
but deep down inside me i cry hidden tears
for the love of my sister that hasn`t known me in years.
Author notes
i wrote this poem
because when i worked with the mentaly disabled people they were so full of love
and i just felt gods love surrond all of us each day.
A contest entry
- ~No Trophy's ~Enter Here by blondone.
600 points, ended May 8, 2007, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
raggyann #12,love
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Congrtas on your gold.You are such a loving warm person freely giving from your heart.
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this is a great insight raggy,, into you the poet ,thanks for sharing xx
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That this won a gold is easy to understand It is an excellent moving poem. I have my mother in a care home after she had a stroke she does not know me now It is so sad when those we love are lost to us although they are there in body Congratulations
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Mentaly disabled, sounds like me. hehe
I loved the poem , deep and careing.
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I really like this piece because it's so sweet and sincere. You did a great job on it and congrats on the gold trophy
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thanks for your comemnts, i do believe though i have commented on all your poems posted so can not really return the favour
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Stunning !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I nearly cried at this. This is deep and very very emotional. What a piece of writing this is. I used to look after people with Alzheimers. It is a terrible terrible condition.
Loss of memory in a loved one is the worst thing - other than death - that can happen to a family. I have an auntie who has this at the moment. Your words are very very powerful indeed. Just one spelling mistake. 'Deppresion' is spelt, 'depression.' I thought this was just breathtaking reading.
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i want to thank everyone who stoped to read this poem
it holds many emotions love and sadness and even joy
when i worked with the mentaly impaired i was blessed
and the patients that i met there were wonderful and brightat times an expressed so much love for me it was amazing
sad how some are disabled but what i always thought was thatthey never had to worry if they were going with god.thank you everyone -
These are words with great impact on the reader's mind, reflecting the devastating effect it had on yours. I once thought that minds that have no option to become tainted by the conditionings that are rammed down our throats every day by mainstream media and the environments created by society, just express what they think and feel, which is often nothing but love. Sad as it may seem to us, there is also a side to it that makes us envy them, realizing also the lack of skill and knowledge to survive the madness of every day life, would kill us almost instantly. Thank you for creating and sharing. It was good to poder your poem. Take care,
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Deep and Emotional Piece
This is very very sad. Wonderful flow and the imagery is really good. Emotion pours through this. Written from the heart. Well done for this. Keep writing, you have great talent. If this piece is true, then I am so sorry for your pain.
Wayne
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thank you wayne
i fixed it
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This write is really good I like it I see you've used the word bank Great Job all you need to do now is put your name in the authors comment and your option # even though I know the option it's the rules and part of the contest ....thank you for this entry
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a good dark piece, with a sighing ending of love here, sad yes but also there is a light that shines positive.
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What a powerful write this is, my friend. It tugs at the heart more and more within every line. Such a sad piece of writing, but none the less, it's one of my favorites you've written. I love the style it's written in, and it has such sentiments...such emotion behind it. The ending definitely leaves the readers thinking about and feeling what we just read. Impacting finish to a wonderful write all around.
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a very good write. the subject is a tough one too.
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This is just beautiful worded, but soooo sad, and yes so true. I would have to say this is a true winner in my book. Shooo how good this is.
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Oh My
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