Pump liquid heroin into my lips
To make them lush and kissable
Pure white skin touchable like silk
Coated in sugar paper
For the lickable factor
Corsets with string pulled tight
I don't need to breathe
Rest your hands on my hips
We can sway sway way
Lost in music and smoke
Let me stand on high stilettos
Make my legs look amazing
Cripple my feet raw and blue
Just run your hand up my legs
Let me know you want me
We can disappear
In tangled sheets
and
Moans of ecstasy
((Am I beautiful yet
Do I look like those girls
In all the magazines?
Or the poster girl
On your bedroom wall?))
A contest entry
- another dirrty pretty!!!yay by Aquamarine..
600 points, ended May 23, 2007, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - -x-Whore-x- by xxRainbowDawnxx.
550 points, ended June 20, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Oh yes... I still wonder how these types actually manage to think they are pretty like this and how men actually find them attractive like this. I think the pervertedness scale needs to be checked as well...
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I hate being shallow, and I hate others vainity.
I wish we all had no eyes and horrible lesions on our faces and bodies...
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Awesome!
Its very alluring
they way you grab
at our attention--
Goodluck bbydoll
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this is awesomely fanrastic i love it
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I love this this is awsome I've been reading yuor writes your unbelievable I loved this its so real and so many find it great to look like that I wish more girls would just be real I loved it it flowed awsome and It left me speechless
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Thank you sooooo much =]
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*fucking a-maz-ing!*
"we can disapear
in tangled sheets
&& moans of ecstasy"
--great lines, great write.
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oooh you are not really 15 with the language and emotion you use in your slightly erotic poem...no way you hot chick...
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You're totally right! I'm not 15 I'm 14 =]
Thank you for the awesome comment.
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((Am I beautiful yet
Do I look like those girls
In all the magazines?
Or the poster girl
On your bedroom wall?))
mmmmmm. this is good. x -
kooooooooooool
i luvd dis...itz so very true az 2 hw some guyz n galz,in order to resembl their heroes n heroines....lose themselves,their originality!
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Thank you =]
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wow
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I enjoy dirty pretty without the annoying puncuation... So go you! I like the implication of "pumping heroin into one's lips" to make them look bigger... nice, ha. I'm sure people can relate to that in todays society...
Thank you for entering my contest.
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Well I can relate to this alot. My ex loved my corset, and that's just how it was with us. Me trying to be the girl on his wall. Only thing is it was his ex. Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.
NoL
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mmmm
corsets eh!
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ooooo a m a z i n g ♥ youve simply beaten any poem on the contest cause this is just dazzling ♥ good luck doll
PrettyX
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Thank you so much!! ^.^
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this poem is amazin i love ik
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Your images are clear and it is easy to see what you show in this poem. I think you misspelled factor. I like those strange collocations "lickable factor" and the atmosphere of the poem but I do think the last line is unnecessary. It adds nothing in my point of view and thepiece wouldend better with bedroom wall, which clearly imples this is for you and thus makes it redundant. Good use of adjectives, easy to read, pronounceable phonemes...
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Hmm.. Yeah. I think it would be better without the last line now you've made me notice it.
Thank you for your comment, it was much appreciated =]
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