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I'm Scared

This is the first time it's gone right
I'm not nursing a broken heart every night
There are no memories i want to forget
There are no times that i regret

But i don't know if i can take this good
Because in my heart it's not understood
I tried to break the commitment chain
But it just came back together again

Will you be able to understand
Can you take this unlike a man
Do you think you will take
How i'm scared a heart may break
I don't know if it will be you or me
I don't know if love is what i need
And i'm not sure if you can take
How i'm scared a heart may break

A crucifix and a broken chain
Is it a token of love or a token of pain
I don't care as long as it comes from you
Because i don't know what to do

Some have said that this is natural
And some have said that i will lose it all
I just say that i have kept you so long
That if you go it won't be wrong

Will you be able to understand
Can you take this unlike a man
Do you think you will take
How i'm scared a heart may break
I don't know if it will be you or me
I don't know if love is what i need
And i'm not sure if you can take
How i'm scared a heart may break

You never bought me flowers
But you were happy to waste my hours
It didn't matter if were laughing or crying
For neither of us was lying

So i keep your heart locked away next to mine
Until that time
We can say that word that scares me so
But i never want the feeling to go

Will you be able to understand
Can you take this unlike a man
Do you think you will take
How i'm scared a heart may break
I don't know if it will be you or me
I don't know if love is what i need
And i'm not sure if you can take
How i'm scared a heart may break

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  • The Hardest Goodbye
    December 23, 2007

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    amaazing good luck in my contest
    xo
    kandy


  • Shenanigans
    December 3, 2007
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    PS: ...Totally diggin' the crucifix image. The things we give when holding on, always very powerful.

  • Shenanigans
    December 3, 2007

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    oh man! This takes me right back to sophomore year of high school. After a long consecutive chain of relationships, I found an Irishman, but was scared/confused, not ready for lov, broke his heart in an attempt to figure life out, [He, like all determined irish people, said 'dammit Shannon, I know what I want and I want you. I am always going to love you, I will always be your best friend."] had "some have said it was natural, some have said I would lose it all" going on...haha, man. Taking me back...
    Anyway, In case you haven't guessed, I pretty much love this piece--I think it expresses your fear/confusion/denial well, the whole waiting for the right time thing... I liked this. No complaints on flow or anything--all in all an excellent piece. good luck!
    --Shannon


  • Eyes Wide Shut gold member
    November 25, 2007
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    this is so beautiful. thank you for entering and good luck.

  • trace3grls
    August 22, 2007
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    great write well done


  • bat-bogey
    August 22, 2007

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    perfect

    i liked this piece. it was very full of emotion. its exactly what i was looking for, even if you broke the 50 lines max. you can be an exception.

    i liked how you repeated one of the stanza's. It really pushed what that part was saying.

    this part really stood out to me, its powerful:

    'So i keep your heart locked away next to mine
    Until that time
    We can say that word that scares me so
    Bit i never want the feeling to go'


    wonderful write. thanks for entering.


  • FlipperSwitch
    July 2, 2007
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    Beautiful!! I love that your thoughts are easily understood but they still are wrapped in the personal aura of your heart. Thank you for this entry.


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    June 25, 2007

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    I can most definately relate to this this feeling sweetie... I am often left feeling this way as well... As I can't accept that good things can happen to me and that someone can genuinely love me... I can't, it just doesn't make any sense. Why now, why not before... It's a trap. So yeah, I can relate, it's a horrible feeling and god I wish I knew whether it ends like this or not.
    Thanks for entering, one of my confessions too.


  • Dark Reaper
    April 25, 2007
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    amazing

    this is an interesting poem and after what I gave you i wonder if I should of just given you some vodka instead haha. Love the poem very interesting but I wonder where the conciquence of the actions you put through your mind atm are going to lead to better or for worse...and hope that he does finally do things to you haha
    Love ya hun
    TK

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