"Triple 000 operater,
What is your emergency?
...
Hello, Are you there?"
-**♥**-
"It's murdering me..."
Alone on the floor of her bedroom,
With all the tears she cried.
A young girl lost her innocence,
She lost all hope &&& died.
All the friends she had,
[Wouldn't help fight her fears]
All her family were unaware,
[Never noticed her tears]
She confided in her blade,
Confided in it's loving embrace.
Her eyeliner smudged on her cheeks,
Tears stained a
*♥Once upon a time♥*
[gorgeous] face.
Voices argued back and forth,
Screamed and fought in her head.
"Do it"
&&&
"No don't"
Helped her as she ||silently bled||
A drop of blood on her parent's perfection,
[They never noticed her secret addiction]
A drop of blood on her friends love,
[She has to be set free into heaven above]
A final gasp of
b
r
e
a
t
h
A final grasp of life.
Slowly but silently she died,
Her hand still clinging to her knife.
"Don't worry sweetie,
Help is on the way.
You just hang in there"
-**♥**-
"They're...
Too...
Late"
Burrdifly.
♥
Author notes
Now, Let me explain.
"It's murdering me..."
Is meant to be describing the pain. I.e.
The pain is killing her. I.e.
It's murdering her.
♥
Burrdifly
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- EMO STUFF ONLY!!! I WANT TO FEEL YOUR PAIN by xlilliexdiesx.
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I love this alot! It really has me speachless. The lines
"She confided in her blade,
Confided in it's loving embrace.
Her eyeliner smudged on her cheeks,
Tears stained a
*♥Once upon a time♥*
[gorgeous] face."
really got to me, and stood out the most. I loved it, it's incredible!
xx Julie.
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"A drop of blood on her parent's perfection,
[They never noticed her secret addiction]"
i liked that
and i completely loved the whole idea of 'it' murdering her. i can relate to this (to some degree) and i no alot of other people do too, alot of people feel like this... and thats sad.
what an amazing write i liked the way you structured this too. very well written
take care, much love
XoXoX
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lol, i got it. This is amazing sweetz. the beginning added a touch of reality to it. You could almost hear the girl talking on the phone!!!
Great job love
-Dani
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thanx hunn!!
I luv ur pic!! it's purdy
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U certainly know how to make someone cry This is so sad, just reading it made me feel trapped. It's a spicken awesome write tho!!
Wooo!
Tommy lubs u!
xo
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