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Figure in the Mirror

I think I remember a that look long ago
That glance in the mirror, the figure I know
Who used to pine for another day,
Another chance, just to throw it away
Who used to think that time went too fast,
Frightened at how many hours had passed
And that solid black and white shadow once cast
But God, what has happened? Why didn't it last?
Where was the melancholy slope,
And who climbed down without the rope?

Sinking deeper in a sleeping spell
Running down lower, through levels of hell
Nothing is solid, there's only air here
In a brooding pensive atmosphere
Once a light on the mirror had shown
It used to bounce back, but now it's unknown
There's always an action, but no one reacts
There may be beliefs, but there are no facts
Not one or the other, it's stuck in between
Eyes open wide, and blurred shapes are seen

Alive in a conscious coma state
This world, prone to desecrate
Between the sweet slumber and barely awake,
The are two ways to go, two paths to take
Now the live one sleeps the most
It's more transparent than a ghost
Now a temporary second story
Forever steals all the glory
I will never forget that glance long ago
At a figure who's lost, the one I used to know

Author notes

April 24, 2007.... This is about how I'd rather be asleep than in reality, because real life is boring and in dreams you can be anywhere. This is why people think there's something wrong with me... I want to sleep forever. I've been leading two lives--- one is the so called "real" world, and the other takes place while I'm asleep. And the real one.... well, it just doesn't appeal to me most of the time.

The catagory is dark/personal/fantasy.

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  • Heavenly Angel
    June 5, 2007

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    Sometimes living in a dream state is a helluva lot better than the real world; I can agree with that about two hundred percent! I enjoyed this; thank you for sharing your thoughts

  • Last Pixie
    May 10, 2007

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    this is truly wonderful. i mean...like...wow. ya know? wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow. there are no words to desribe it. helloooooooooooo finalist.

  • Talia
    May 5, 2007

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    This is a great piece. makes no odds asleep or awake there are always those bad dreams that darken our door ways. Enjoyed this, great write. Read through it though there are a few spelling mistakes ect.

    Good luck in the contest

  • Andu
    May 5, 2007
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    Real life can not only be boring, but even painful and hard. No wonder we need to escape, and what better place than to a world of dreams.
    I really like this poem, beautifully written, your rhyme and rhythm are excellent. Great write, thanks for entering my contest and good luck!

  • wolfcub
    May 4, 2007
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    WOW! Really great rhymes and very powerful imagery and vocabulary. I like!
    I love dreaming too, which is why I spend so much time writing - you make the rules, and it's like being in a dream!
    Thankyou for entering and good luck in my contest.
    Katie
  • heartofpainfultears
    April 25, 2007
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    this is a wonderful piece. i am glad you wrote this and posted in my contest good luck
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