Small town porch swinging on summer afternoon evenings
I snap green beans
And hear children laughing,and dogs barking
On a distant street close by
There is the noise of a eighteen wheeler changing gears
I spy a small blackbird that is patrolling a brick wall
And a mother oriole feeds worms
To a nest of her babies well hidden
In a giant magnolia tree~
Barefoot children play on the lawn and make hollyhock dolls
And scatter gravel on a parking lot
I watch a ladybug
Explore a blade of grass
I smell someone's fresh-cut lawn~
As it starts to get dark I go visit
And softly gossip
Over cookies and iced-tea
Small town twilight
Recalling summer memories~
Author notes
I love this poem because it is so real and down to earth..........Full of Summer Memories
A contest entry
- Summer by HannahBrookeXD.
470 points, ended May 14, 2007, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
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This is wonderful, Sis. I can see why it has brought in the gold trophies.
Beautiful
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One of your best, Sis! I bookmarked this one! Very nicely done (the gold trophies prove it!)
Lots of Love,
♥ Maureen
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This is so beautiful, hon.. Full of rich nostalgia and old fashioned memories.. Well done!
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Visiting this beauty for the third time and wishing I could give you more clappies, so I'll make some: lol
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excellent
Oh my such a beautiful write. And so deserving of the golds. Congratulations. -
Now those are very nice summer memories to have sweetie, well done.
Wonderful Sis....Best wishes in the contest
Bro
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Yes
And where have those wonderful times gone to? Perhaps revisting my youth in this mind can bring back some of those beautiful memories poet.
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Beautifully gold and truly an amazing verse. Congratulations on this winning entry. A pleasure to read and to enjoy. Bravo dear poetess! Your imagery is stunning!
~Pamela 
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wow!,,,now..that is how i wish i can spend my summer too!!!..lol..really nicely done..beautiful imagery..u can paint summer as well as any artist...just breath taking...lovely job..best of luck
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Well done, Sis! :)
CONGRATULATIONS on winning GOLD for this poem about the simple pleasures we can experience sitting on a porch, soaking up the atmosphere of a pleasant summer day. Great imagery here!
Love Ya!
<3 Maureen
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Oh yes, hollyhock dolls and all the rest... I've done it and loved it. A wonderful poem that is filled with loving memories.
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This is so beautifully reminiscent, Sis. It reminds me so much of being at my grandparents in Gold Hill, Oregon. They had a big front porch, too and we'd spend a lot of time there, talking, relaxing and yes, even snapping green beans from their garden.
A wonderful poem and I wish you best of luck in the contest
love and
Dee
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Such a peacefullness to this, reminds me of the small town I live in as well. Quess what I was just doing? Snapping beans! fresh from the garden! Beautiful poem, loved it. Gold worthy for sure.
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Awesome!! Reminds me of My Mother in laws house snapped many a beans at her house she has a magnolia too. She lives in the city but her whole side yard is a huge garden. All of her yard is full of flowers too. and has two apple trees. Congrats on the Gold Was well deserved.
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What a beautiful heart stopping piece you have created. It's very worthy of a gold my friend. I love the imagery in your words....
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lovely memories
when life gets busy,it is indeed time to sit down and remember the past as I so often do, you penned this beautifully,thanks for sharing, good luck
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Excellent
Oh my sis this is stunning and so well crafted. Many blessings in the contest. -
Yes, summer days are wonderful arn't they?! I love the title! Great Job and thanks for entering! -hannah
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This makes me feel at home. It seems like what most people around there do. Although, what I do may be a little different in the summer You have such a pretty poem. Either way, I can relate. Those are such beautiful things that you have written...it brings back all the memories of summer and what it's like. I especially like the imagery, it is perfectly done. Describing things in poems you must do wonderfully. I enjoyed reading this poem...there's something about it. You did awesome!
Good luck,
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"Small town twilight
Recalling summer memories~ "
Loved it, especially the ending. This evoked nostalgia for me and made me miss even more the family reunions I had when my grandparents, aunts/uncles were living. Luv ya bluebell, ♥ Belle
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Blushi...
I love it......I could not add to this what everone else has touched upon.....to me it was just being there and vivid as the smile on your face..
Lots of love
Ya Hunk
Mally
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Great job on this piece. I felt as if I was there and it took me back to my own memories of summer. What a wonderful write this is for both the feeling of summer and the sights and sounds.
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Well done, Sis!
You make me feel like I'm right there, sitting on the porch with you, enjoying the sights and sounds of a lazy summer day. Loved it! Good Luck in the contest!
Love you, too!
♥ Maureen
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sounds like the most beautiful summer anyone can have.those are the summers of my youth.living in the city has its summer memories but the ones i had when i was in a smaller place can't be replaced.i want to spend the summer with you.
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beautiful expression
Wow Sis, this brings back so many memories. Your words create a very peaceful, quiet mood for the reader, bringing them along to sit with you on that porch swing. I can hear the snapping of those beans.
The picture is just lovely.
Best wishes for the contest!!
Love & Hugs,
Jeannette
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nice
You captured both sight and sounds with your words. You give a very peaceful, gentle feel with this. It reminds me of some the towns I've passed through. -
Small town porch swinging on summer afternoon evenings
I snap green beans
And hear children, birds and dogs barking
I love the picture it so very lovely. You capture the essence of small town living. When I live in the city once went to the farmer market. Now I grow my own. I can relate to your write. It lovely Your words are vivid as ever. I hope you are doing well. I am going to lay down for awhile take care love your admire and sis brenda
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lovely
summer is a season for all to enjoy ,lovely visions and free verse ,worded beautifully, gives me an urge to sit with my icetea and gossip with friends , thanks for sharing sis..
love MM
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Have you ever watched the movie JuneBug.I kind of got that small town feel from this.The lazy days of summer and for some reason a southern summer.Good imgery and thank you for the link.Good luck in the contest.
~Helen
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This beautifully reminesct poem reminds me of my summers so long ago, growing up in the country. I'd love to go back to those days of a simpler life.
A very lovely poem, Sis It really does remind me of years gone by. We even had a long porch like in your picture and many times I sat with my grandmother, sometimes helping string beans or churn butter.
Your imagery here is vivid, your verbiage a pleasure to read. Wonderful, I love it
In the third line did you mean to write 'And' instead of 'An'
I wish you the best in the contest
love and
Dee
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Very satisfying to read this poem!
You are back in fine form, Susan! I just love the mention of hollyhock dolls because I made them at my grandmother's house when I visited her for the summertimes. I put them together with toothpicks. Your poem is just delicious!
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thank you all
Thank you all for your wonderful comments...
I am mostly used to doing rhyme so this was new to me....just sounds odd cuz I am always rhyming and I want to give you all applause but my computer is not wanting to let me for some reason...when I fix the kinks in I will though....
Again thank you for your wonderful kind comments...
They mean so much to me
Hugs n love
Susan~~~
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this poem is absolutely delicious ...
the way you use imagery in your write, transports me right into your garden ... all the plants, flowers, bugs, children and people you talk about, come to life on the screen of my mind ... I can smell, taste, hear, see and touch everything you describe here so masterfully and colorfully ... you are indeed a true magician of poetry ... I am in awe of your amazing talent ...
thank you so much for sharing this with me,
maa
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Priceless!!
This is one Priceless memory to share Sis
Love the images You bring forth that Touches the Heart
Beautifully penned!!
Now I am thirsty and wanting to take a walk~
again...
felt as if there
Thank You for sharing this Gem!!
Best wishes to You in the contest!
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Beautiful
This is so sweet sis. Just warms like a summer's eve. Truly so vivid and touching. Make me long for summer. Good luck in the contest.
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