Rich coffee smudge
on a mug of porcelain
Reload for the photographer
camera clue in the background
Usually neat as a pin
no sugar crystals astray
Did you catch your best shot
or raptured by aroma - did she get away?
Setting down her hat of khaki
tapping a painted nail on her hot cup
She’s been watching you too
and the Joe that you sup
Tailing the who, what or where trail
making a mark on thoughts and minds
an offering to the rag using a snap or a pen
filtered not censured are the expresso's daily grinds
Author notes
Here's the link:
http://www.cafexperiment.com/
You'll get to see the picture I was inspired by and my poem I wrote for the picture.
Go to cafexperiment click on cafexperiment, then calendar, then the date I picked 07 <-this is for the month of April.
My poem is in the comment section!
Come on - it get's you out of the house (so to speak)
A contest entry
- A Spot by ea.
500 points, ended April 27, 2007, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Ah, I loved this cup with its coffeebean flower. Good choice! I loved the feeling you evoked in this poem of a missed opportunity -- reminds me of my coffee days in NYC where it was indeed a good way to meet someone, hanging out at the Hungarian Pastry Shop near Columbia or at Cafe Reggio in the Village Of course, when you're young, anywhere will suffice, but cáfes were my pied a terre. Ooo... that third stanza in particular is yummy. I think I might be tempted to change l. 8 to "did she get away?" The last stanza is also quirky. This one is growing on me by the second. Thanks so much for coming to the cafeXperiment and please fill up another cup if you have a chance.
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I made a few changes!
Took your advice on the "did she get away?"
Then changed the whole last verse.
(flips hand from side to side) Still not happy with it!
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I actually liked the way the last stanza was -- "quirky" is a good thing with me. Do you still have it? Maybe you could post it in your author's notes for comparison.
Not sure about "Rest for the photographer
camera clue in the background" I understand it as it relates to the photo but maybe play around with this a little more. By the way, carcrashhumor was able to link directly to her photo. If you use her link you can get to yours by hitting previous and then post the exact picture link here. -
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Dear ea
Thanks for the tip for the link!
& I nixed the other ending - Darn!
Now to check out that photographer again!
Tang
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I liked this poem and its connection to the photographer. Very well done.
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