You are but a breath of sweet words
And I’m anxious to hear more
To taste more
But charming as your tongue is
It’s flavor’s almost as unpleasant as your stare
So let me just read your lips
And you can keep my body warm.
Please tell me what you think
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one part of this reminds me of a...thing..that I hate..this "face with foul eyes" girl I once fell aroouund love with
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Awesome!
Who hasn't felt this way?
You have spoken truth and you've done it effectively and simply, and it's beautiful to me...
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I can sympathize with that, lol. Good job
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LOL Ohhhh boy....yeah, been here, done that. Nicely done with so few words......thats hard to pull of!
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like you need a guy but you're just desperate. you don't like him but you want held. i've been there.
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I loved this poem. very good write though it was short.
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I liked it
I can identify with this, I liked it. -
Hehe
It amuses me...
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haha
the meaning is lost upon but the poem is awesome loved reading it... and even though i wanted more i think you finished it perfectly
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wonderful
this poem almost has a feeling of being suspended, like ihad to read the whole thing in one breath but not exactly being rushed. "breath of sweet words". Very effective description. Appropriate length, nice to read, good poem
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