Acidic imperfections, corrode the sparkling plastic,
Toxic beauty poisons my soul.
Mannequin lies seduce my mind,
As a corrupted reality glorifies portuding hip bones.
Vomit stains my teeth,
As I pray to the porcalin God.
I scream for grace as I cry for perfection,
With an infectious angel, I know I'll purge away my flaws.
I kiss the cloride lips,
Become trash lined in glitter scars.
I'm a cocaine babydoll, flying upon tattooed wings,
A drunken disaster beneath synthetic stars.
Nothing but a piece of heaven,
Thrown to the gutters, another forgotten glamor whore.
I see the elegant distruction,
And still I beg for more.
Author notes
hey great contest I love dirty pretty...not sure if this is either good or what your looking for...but I tried...
I chose:
1.-Evanescence-everybodys fool
2.
word bank:
-poison-acid-hip bones-seduction-glitter
-imperfections/perfection-mannequin-kiss-whore-lips-cocaine-babydoll-fairy wings-chloride-tattoos-midnight-drunken-synthetic-tainted-
and
3. write about an eating disorder
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A contest entry
- giiiive up babe && droown yourself in a.c.i.d [i lalalaloved you] by PaperChainHearts.
450 points, ended May 3, 2007, 13 entries
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Comments
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Incredible
This is one of the very best dark like poems I have ever seen. I found myself rereading this poem and I really like it. what really hits me the most is how deep you were with your wording and although this was from a contest I liked th way you used your words. very well penned and an all round awesome entry. congrats on winning my fvaorute colored trophy Green and keep on penning away the words we call poetry
Sincerely, Paul =}
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This is just superb! I'm not usually into this stuff but this caught my eye and it is wonderful!
"I'm a cocaine babydoll, flying upon tattooed wings,
A drunken disaster beneath synthetic stars."
Just wow. Great line, great words - Great poem!!
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awesome
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Whoa that was totally the bomb?! What did I say?! the bomb?? eww no this was um...totally amazing! I can express how awesome it was. actually you know what I think, I think its flawless and perfect, totally nothing wrong with it to change a single letter would be a sin lol Totally awesome! Hope you win the contest it sure wins my vote!
-TragicallyInspired
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great write hun
wow tasha this was absoutly amazing... you dida great job at it... i love every poem u write...you always manage to amaze me soemhow its great.... keep up the great work
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this is absoltely amazing, i think you did a really great job with the words from the word bank. I really loved the second stanza it was something that I could completely relate too, and you wrote it exteremly beautifully. greattt job bb.
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wow - another superb write. It is written in a sort of subtle manner, which works really well with this piece.
Well Done,
Keep It Up,
xUnseenLovex
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wow this is a great poem I can relate to alot of what u were saying except I starve myself for perfection so if u ever need anyone to talk to im here u can add me to msn or yahoo but anyways this was really good right keep up the good work
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wow an amazing poem i love it i'm not into these kinds of poems but this was very well done.
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Wow... I'm not really into the dirty-pretty stuff, but this one was awesome... It was easier to understand because there was no random punctuation! Aside from the odd spelling mistake [ie "portuding"= "protruding", "cloride"="chloride", and there was one more, can't remember!], you pulled this off amazingly! A deep write full of emotions... Good job, Tasha! Can't wait to read more from you!
*hugs*
Laura
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I kiss the cloride lips,
Become trash lined in glitter scars.
I'm a cocaine babydoll, flying upon tattooed wings,
A drunken disaster beneath synthetic stars.
wow. I love it. and you used all three options
amazing!
♥
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"Mannequin lies seduce my mind,
As a corrupted reality glorifies portuding hip bones."
Wow, if that just didn't hit the nail on the head. I thought you did a good job, especially with the above quote. It hit home with me.
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Nice...so dark but yet very beautiful..wow I wish I could write like this hehe you did an amazing job with this poem its really really good!!!!!! I'm loving it all the way hehe anyawys before I keep writing about how great and amazing this..because it is lol I better stop before I write like 10 page long comment hehe I'll stop once again awsome write hun..take care!
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Everytime i read a poem under this style i always say this first: its not exactly my style, so i dont exactly always like it. and its no exception. i just think the words lack sooo much origanallity that you could portray it better, you dont have to change the style. just some of thewords to make it mean something. but thats all how i honestly feel. if it works for you than all i am saying is aa bunch of bullshit. do what cha like
xoxox good luck w/ the contest or whatever! -
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Upon Your Dead Body! If you didn't like this poem why did you read it? this poem is amazing and how in the world does it not have any originality to it...like ok there She has written many poems and if u havent read them well you dont know anything..I believe that she is an amazing writer.........anyways if you read any of her poems you would know that everything she writes means something...I believe if you dont like it dont comment!!!!
P.S this is my opinion!
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Oh very nice!
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