i try to be everything to my closest of friends,
i love, and i love
them all, to no end...
but "everything" is confusing,
it's different,
it's weird...
you can only get so close,
before you're no longer friends
i try, and i try
to see smiles and cheers,
but when you accomplish that feat,
it all ends in tears...
so, i sit alone and wonder,
i wonder...
what's wrong with this picture?
what's up with this game?
and i hide, i hide
all my feelings
inside, inside,
for it's the only way
to get by, to say bye...
now it's time to be everything to my own self
learn to love what i am,
and why i am...
and where i am...
maybe then, i will finally understand
who i am...
Please tell me what you think
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I LOVE IT, I LOVE IT, I LOVE YOU to an extent in which words can't describe. I read it out loud, and...damn...it blew me away. On terms with the subject...i can identify. It's something that i learned, and that I'm getting over.
Great write, i will have to read more!
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learn to love what i am,
and why i am...
and where i am...
maybe then, i will finally understand
who i am...
Humm you made me think too with your intriguing approach here with so much emotions and the philosophy of life in the words of the each line..This is touching the layers of the life to reveal the mystries of this nature which is called a life..a great heartfelt write is here..
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This is such a sad yet heartfelt poem.
I know the feeling of being with your
friends like this. It seems that sometimes
they are only your friends when they want
or need something from you. You have a very
big and sweet heart to go out of your way
for your friends like that. It's really
what a friendship is all about. The world
needs more people like you in it! I do
hope that this certain group of people
that you call friends opens up their eyes
and realize your true intentions and
come around for you. I think you did a
wonderful job expressing yourself in this
one. Great work and thanks a lot for
sharing this here! Keep it up!
Jeremy0826 -
This is such a heart felt poem. I enjoyed it immensely mainly because of the emotion you've put into your words. You really believe in your words and that's what makes this poem not only believable to the readers but also they can feel and see what you felt and saw when you created it. Nicely done with this one!
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Really great.
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This is such a great poem. I love the way you have written the poem from the beginning talking about love and friends and end it off trying to understand yourself. The last two lines were so powerful.
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WOW! This is a very well written poem! I loved the flow. It is very inciteful. I can relate to this in all aspects. Cool background too.
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a question that everybody in this world needs to truly figure out. who you are! and nobody should be something that they aren't, or that somebody else wants them to be. speak for your self i guess. i love how you repeated some of the words. it added more to this piece. great write! i really love the inside meaning that you are relaying to the reader. and you wrote it so well. so many can relate, i had to find myself and stop being who my parents wanted me to be, although my mother still hates it...but that's life. be who you are and don't be ashamed of it! those who don't like it don't matter!
~bee
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I do not know why some of us must go thri=ough this...I call it the pruning...it is almost like Love chips away the illusions of love so that we may find what Loving really means.
Terrific write!
Bravo!
Marianne -
lovely
i try to be everything to my closest of friends,
i love, and i love
them all, to no end...
but "everything" is confusing,
it's different,
it's weird...
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I have been in this situation a time or two... Through those experiences I can say that I have been able grow and love in a way that is healthy for my relationships. I liked your poem. Thank you for sharing. peace and light, Kendal
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A beautiful introspective write. The flow is wonderful!
To thine own self be true. You must learn to know yourself and love yourself before you can share yourself.
Words of advice from old wise cracking Papa, LOL!
His words speak truth though and so i pass them onto you.
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I like this one. It reminds me of "Theme from Valley of the Dolls".
You've beautifully portraid the utter confusion of relationships and self identity. Complicated... to say the very least.
I like the repetative wording in certain lines...
"and i hide, i hide
all my feelings
inside, inside,
for it's the only way
to get by, to say bye..."
It feels like an echo, and really brings the point of this piece across in a unique way.
Very good write. A pleasure to read.
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i've never been a fan of rhyming, but in this sense it indeed feel more like an echo than a rhyme.... so i'm glad you made that statement = ]
i'm also very glad you enjoyed the piece
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You have some very well woven words here as well as an infusion of beautiful expressions and feelings. Write on my dear friend and keep spreading your enchanting words across the pages to warm and inspire us all~
♥ Touchof1der
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i think this was wonderful!!! i know that sometimes you love with out ceasing, only to find out they dont feel the same, it is dishearting to find out.. because you are friends. and it is important to find out who you are, i found out that i would not be what i am today with out my friends, they have helped me to be a stronger person. so i hope you keep them, sometimes they are worth it. well wishes, seltz!
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Wow. This was amazing. I could really relate to this poem. I often feel the very same way. It seems no matter how hard I try the relationships fail and I am the only one left standing. You just stay strong. You can get through this.
Guin -
Wow. This was amazing. I could really relate to this poem. I often feel the very same way. It seems no matter how hard I try the relationships fail and I am the only one left standing. You just stay strong. You can get through this.
Guin
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you're an amazing person, sometimes
do you know that?
"i love, and i love
them all, to no end..."
"i try, and i try
to see smiles and cheers,"
"and i hide, i hide
all my feelings"
you have distinguishable style in your writing that i've never read before in others work
you pour out your thoughts as if poetry is your diary, and i think it is wonderful
sometimes i feel like you know me, so personally
you're an amazing poet that i believe everybody should read
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