slick - in the shower
brashly drops the bar of soap
thinks I’ll pick it up
Patricia Gibson-Little
Author notes
I like naughty. I just wasn't sure how naughty you wanted...
Written July 20th, 2003
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- Soemthing Naugty by 1star.
250 points, ended July 25, 2003, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Cute write , but I do believe you should rename it a Senyru <---Senryu ? ( sp ), it is my understanding that a Haiku is supposed to be about nature. I was made aware of that by a few people on here , and thought I should share that with you. Please do not be offended , it is just meant as a helpful suggestion
Good luck in the contest
Reenie
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good write lol i dont wanna know if ya picked it up or not but keep it up
ill be looking soon for more of your work
rock on keep it up ill be back
~Hannah~
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TastY!
Uhmmm Yummy ... Vey visual this one. I love steamy Haiku. Good job! -
Well I only see a problem with dropping the soap if you are in prison and have to shower with big guy named Bubba! LOL
Cute! ~Laura -
lol, good one dont wanna know if it was picked up or not, lol
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