Under the spell of an undisturbed sleep,
The very fabric of time will fray
Darkness has a secret to keep.
A mysterious lake, ten thousand miles deep;
In silence, the waves of the ocean lay
Under the spell of an undisturbed sleep.
In a mournful, lifeless heap
Carcasses collect more and more each day
Darkness has a secret to keep.
Confused creatures bewilderedly weep,
Not knowing why their brothers lay
Under the spell of an undisturbed sleep.
Wicked souls sneak and creep
Not heading the warnings that others will say;
Darkness has a secret to keep.
For what was once a coral reef
Has become a cesspool of death and decay
Under the spell of an undisturbed sleep;
Darkness has a secret to keep.
Author notes
Okay, this is a Villanelle (I hope...) Basically this is a poem that illustrates pollution in the ocean and how devastating it is, being in the Earth Day mood. This is pretty much my first dark poem (that doesn't turn into a happy poem at the end) The word "Villanelle" just sounds really dark or evil. Well anyway, here is a guide to the poem in case it's a little bit confusing:
Stanza One: This stanza is just illustrating the theme of the poem, as well as the recurring lines 1 and 3.
Stanza Two: This stanza creates a picture in the reader's mind of how lifeless bodies of water are when they are ruined by pollution.
Stanza Three: This stanza is a quite graphic one about how sea creatures are choked by trash and poisoned by pollution, etc. and that it's happening every day.
Stanza Four: This stanza illustrates how pollution is also an impact on the other creatures around the ones that are intoxicated; it destroys sea life food chains and constricts the availability of food.
Stanza Five: This is probably the most confuzing stanza: it is referring to pirate fishers who break the law and fish without permission or licenses.
Stanza Six: This stanza explains the overall results of pollution: the beauty of the oceans demolished and species endangered or extinct.
Sorry I'm so lengthy with the explanation, but I thought the poem would be befuddling. Thank you
A contest entry
- Ages 13 and Under Only ~ Form Poetry by Amunet Wolfbane.
525 points, ended May 19, 2007, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think!
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well, I am amazed. I remember you writing this during science or something. ^.^ I love the guide. it really helped me to understand the poem. i'm glad you got a gold for it, it was well deserved. you should show this to mr. Lafond or something, he would love it being all naturey and all. it's very dark and unlike you to write something depressing seeing how you are just the opposite of emo. however, it was very well written. the flow was great and it's incredible given it's a first try at a villanelle.
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Absolutely beautiful. The Villianelle is not an easy form to do and you've done a great effort on it here. A enchanting story line as well :D I really like this. Bravo!
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What a very strong message you've managed to bring across within the lines of your villanelle
and yes, the form is perfect! magnificent job!
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Wonderfully written Villanelle!
Gives out a strong message.
Harrisham Minhas
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you are a smart and wise person, i like this poem and that message it gives, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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