Don't utter words in distaste
you know the effect
that those hollow words have
on soiled skin & bruises.
& I'll offer you something
you never dared dreaming of.
Is sanity such a way away?
I'll break the seal of approval
& I'll be the one to show you
[The truth in its entirety -
like you always wanted]
Don't say you don't want
to be saved
[I can see you do
every pore in your being
screams for hope]
Don't utter those words now
hate is meaningless
when you can live,
hold out your hand
[& test these waters]
It's not really the end
for it was better than
nothing.
Author notes
Well.... I thought up the title when I was shopping. I felt in a particularly poem writing mood tonight however. I hope y'all like.
A contest entry
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Comments
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Very expressive and on an interesting topic as well. Nicely done. I liked the way you made the person sound hateful and distrusting of hope and being afraid of it. In a way we are like that when we think nothing better can come of things. I liked the way you promised them something and gave it them, it was really sweet. Nice write.
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Beautiful
Loved it! Really nice language and meaning. Very deep & well written. Welldone! *hugs*
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Thank you hunni! xx
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