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~ Lost Children ~

Missing image

~ * ~

Galvanized

rocks of misty morns dew,

crashing against searching souls embrace.

Mossy antiquated pebbles gather thoughts once

shared. Romancing memories oblique,

as years of crafted hopes

sink deeper

~ * ~

Youthful age

ripened, swells within frail

moments, reminders of Gods' beauty.

Ghostly horizons depart, transcending beyond

hollowed waters in darkened abyss.

Cast out netting of hopes

forbidden

~ * ~

Majestic

oceans no longer calm

crying spirits. Souls succumb to hate

all that is good within this place called paradise.

Forgive us Father, for we know not

what we do. Please accept

our sins Lord

~ * ~

Faithfully

into currents foamy

tides, we leap into rolling waves to

wash away sadness from losing our children to

diseases forged deeply. Alcohol

and drugs have stolen a

right to live

~ * ~

 

 

 

 

 

 

~ Arkbear ~

Author notes

~ Dedicated to those who suffer from the

Disease of Alcoholism, or the Additions of Drugs ~

 

 

A *Triquain String*

 

Syllable count:

 

3-6-9-12-9-6-3

3-6-9-12-9-6-3

3-6-9-12-9-6-3

3-6-9-12-9-6-3

 

*Triquain*

 

created by,

 

Shelley A. Cephas

A contest entry

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Comments

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  • Lionsloves Lair
    May 7, 2007
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    3 claps...9pts

    Lionsloves Lair

    ~Lilac


  • ShelleyA gold member
    May 3, 2007
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    I've posted comments on this piece before, but I just wanted to say I enjoyed reading this poem very much.


  • SurelyWritten
    May 2, 2007
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    great form, thanks for entering

    • Arkbear gold member
      May 3, 2007
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      Shirley ~

      Thank you for this contest of prewrites ~

      I am not really ever thrilled to enter prewrites into contests...but I'm gonna be totally honest with you on this page......When I wrote this about a week and a half ago, I was very happy with it....and it didn't even get an HM ~

      Now, don't get me wrong...I am not a sore loser by any means.....but I felt this write was much more than a Trophy contender...I felt it was a message which was not being heard ~

      So....therefore, I thank you for allowing it to be entered into another contest ~

      Yours ~

      Have a great evening,

      Bear ~

      • SurelyWritten
        May 3, 2007

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        I completely understand, as I've had that happen before. You should be very proud of this write and I am glad you took this opportunity to re-enter it. Good luck

        -Shirley


  • StarEyes
    May 2, 2007
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    My dearest Uncle,

    And once again this is just as amazing as the first time I read it!!!!! I hope this message is heard by many!!!!!!!!

    Loves ya

    Nyetta


    • Arkbear gold member
      May 2, 2007
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      My Dear Niece ~

      Big Bear Hugz for you!!



      Uncle Bear ~


  • LionessK silver member
    April 28, 2007

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    A subjest that touches my heart... beautifully written. I love the descriptions you used.. the ocean imagery. Thank you for sharing your words with me.


    ~Kristy

    • Arkbear gold member
      April 28, 2007
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      My Dear Lioness ~

      Kristy ~

      Thank you for your review, yet most of all, thank you for the opportunity to enter this wonderful contest ~

      May you have a great day ~

      Bear ~


  • Whoochi gold member
    April 25, 2007

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    Very well done and yes so true...I know, firsthand as a recovering alkie/addict the damage I have done to my children...by the grace of God my children have lived through it and came out stronger for it, albeit, one day at a time....ty for this! Truly hit home with me...


  • pixxiepoetess
    April 25, 2007

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    You did an amazing job with the triquain form. It's truly a stunning piece. Good luck in the contest. >pixxie<


    • Arkbear gold member
      April 25, 2007
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      No entry??

    • Arkbear gold member
      April 25, 2007
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      Thank you my Dear >Pixxie

      I have not even checked to see if you are in the contest....or maybe I have????


      Been so busy can't remember where I have been for the past 10 hours

      I'll check in just a moment Dear ~

      Thank you for stopping by Sweety ~

      Bear ~


  • Frozentearz
    April 25, 2007

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    As shelly said you have brought forth a very powerful message and after each verse gave us much to stop and ponder over sigh..
    you have made me stop and think over my am coffee,
    Thank you so much for sharing,
    Warm thoughts and light your way
    Frozentearz

  • ShelleyA gold member
    April 25, 2007

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    A lovely write, presentation and powerful message. Perfect form. Very good imagery, flow and tone. Lovely depth of feeling. Vivid descriptives. Good word choice, alliteration and assonance. Well crafted and a most enjoyable read.


  • FisherCat
    April 24, 2007

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    WOW!!!!! And Double WOW!!!

    This Bubba was absolutely fantastic!!!! This gives one a hell of a lot of hope! This has such a wonderful message in it!!! Hopefully it will help just one person find the strength they need to keep on that path! Thanks for sharing this most wonderful read. Best of luck in the contest! Keep that fabulous pen of yours forever flowing.

    Love ya

    Brother Cat

    P.S. this cost me three points, but well worth it! hehehe I'm gonna have to stop reading your stuff for the night, I am running out of points. hehehe

  • StarEyes
    April 24, 2007

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    My dearest Uncle,


    I love it!!!!! The message this carries is fantastic!!! I have been one for the drug or alchol scene, but have had friends there, as well as my brother.

    You my dearest uncle, are a wonder with words!!!!! Thanks for your gift of words to the world!!!

    Best of luck in this contest!!


    Loves ya lots

    Big s

    Nyetta


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    April 24, 2007

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    Very, very well done! A most awesome sharing! These are killers of our children...
    You wrote this so very well! Well done!
    Wishing you all the best


  • troyias
    April 24, 2007

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    wonderful

    This is and absoutley wonderful write. for form is perfect and the word choice is amazing. The flow and rythem is splendid. Great Job.

    *Go with God* my friend,

    Valerie


  • ButterflyforChrist
    April 24, 2007

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    Beautiful flow and expression! I love the form used here. It's beautiful!
    Thank you for sharing, Bear!
    You're a wonderful writer! I enjoy reading your work.


  • PurpleLogic
    April 24, 2007
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    extreamly well done...well presented!

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