peanut butter by Peter Pan
manufactured in neverlan'
What happened, are you a crook?
You gave a job to Captain Hook?
Who's job it is to oversee
peanut butter quality?
You'd better fire that man
'cause it's your peanut butter we'll have to ban!
A contest entry
- Should we ban Peter Pan? by Melodies.
450 points, ended April 29, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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NIcely stroked!
short sweet and creamy funny. I like the point of view of a flummoxed customer this poem is penned from.
-Keep the ink flowing
-Sage of the east!
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Smart and true and funny!
Fine and funny and packed with nutty wisdom! 
your poem rocks me toward the cupboard to get out the peanut butter and make a sandwich! Actually, I am eating some natural peanut butter I bought at Wal-Mart and it's in the refrigerator. OH MY GOSH it is GOOD! 
This contest is driving me crazy and your poem is wonderful! 
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this is great honey, the rhyme scheme is very natural and your word usage is great.. excellent.. maybe the first line could be Peter Pan peanut butter just a suggestion.. hope you do well in the contest... I think its a winner
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What were they thinking leaving our good health in
the hands of a man with a hook?
loved your take on this sticky situation.
laurie.
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