Here in the dark I sit and think,
And my thoughts always return to you,
My heart is now my only link,
To the past that I once knew.
You are gone from my life,
They took you away from me,
That loss stabbed me like a knife,
And for all this time, I could not see.
You were still here, in little ways,
And in the words I say, and what I do,
My life was changed when I met you that day,
And your memory will stay true.
You are in my heart from now on,
No matter how bad things are,
And even if you’re dead and gone,
You are now my guiding star.
Author notes
this is my frist poem.. hope you like it
A contest entry
- ~No Trophy's ~Enter Here by blondone.
600 points, ended May 8, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Nice work hun, I like it a lot (but you know that already
) I wanted to stop by and review it anyways The only thing I'd be careful of, as has been pointed out to me many times, is using "and" all the time. In most cases you don't need it, it only takes away from the poem by adding useless repitition. Nice rhyme and rhythm, the poem flows well and captures your emotion beautifully as well. Keep that pen moving
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I do like it but you will need to read the rules again
add your name to the authors comments and the option number you wrote about and your in there...
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oh,.. sorry
sorry about that.. ill fix that right away^^
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You are really good, I really love it.
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