The bitter taste of a love now gone,
Dances on my tongue,
Like a handful of skittles gone horribly wrong.
"And the tears are tearing down her face,
Like the blades of so many knives!
She looks at you, as she's slowly added,
To your list of ruined lives!"
She burns in hell,
She burns in hell... not,
In a waiting room, waiting, wwaiting...
Ripping death petals, from a razor blade flower,
The taste of her blood,
Is bitter, and sour..
The doctors come to tell me, she'll be dead, within the hour....
"And the tears are tearing down her face,
Like the blades of so many knives!
She looks at you, as she's slowly added,
To your list of ruined lives!"
I stop breathing,
And stop believing,
That this is anything more,
Than the final score,
In 'A Prelude To A Nightmare'!
And the tears are tearing down her face,
Like the blades of so many knives!
SO MANY KNIVES!!
(so many knives!)
And she looks at you,
(with those eyes)
as she's slowly added,
To your list of...
RUINED..LIVES!!!!
And the taste of a love once had,
Has become spoiled, and gone bad,
But it's already poisoned me,
And there's nothing I can do,
"She was
the only
song I knew...."
Author notes
OPTION 6:: wordbank...Love
Life
Sour
Petals
Ripping
Tearing
Breathing
Blade
Knife
Tears
Skittles
Believe
Death
A contest entry
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I like the anger and pain in this. I shuddered a few times. I loved the reference to skittles!
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I like it! Good luck in the contest!
Laura
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congratulations! thanx for entering x x
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Beautiful
This is an incredibly written poem. The ryhyme is kind of subtle in places which gives it more of an edge in the long run. I can relate to this on an emotional level that I'm not of liberty to share in this way, but this touched me...the line "She was the only song I knew..."If I only had a nickel for how many times I have wounded someone with honesty. You are very talented, though I am sure you don't need me to tell you that.
-Shae Lynn
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this is amazing and beautiful, so well written i really liked reading it and felt your pain, thanx for entering good luck x x x
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