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I’ll Keep On

  

 

While I’m going through hell
I’ll keep on smiling
Even with all the worries
I’ll keep on piling

On the straight and narrow
I’ll keep on going
With an upbeat attitude
I’ll keep on growing

And within all my sadness
I’ll keep on living
My heart is filled with love
I’ll keep on giving
 
 
 
 

Author notes

I haven’t written in consistently for a while and I felt it necessary to get some honest criticism to maybe get my poetic fire burning again. So, yeah, hit me with your best shot. I can take it……………..

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  • poetryality silver member
    April 30, 2007

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    I think your ability to write is like riding a bike poet. Once you learn the balance secret, you seldom fall off again. You are a poet. The muse sometimes takes a hiatus but it never quits. The mood of this poem is inspiring. I agree that no matter what we must still forge ahead. Very sound and intuitive writing here J. It's been a while since I've read your works and on this day I am happy that I read this one. I needed these words.

    Congratulations on the Honorable Mention. This poem is definitely worthy.


    Much Love ♥

    Renee


  • LionessK silver member
    April 28, 2007

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    Smiling through hell... yes I can relate to that. a write full of sadness, hope and love..
    it touches my heart on many levels.


    ~Kristy


  • Electric Sunrise gold member
    April 26, 2007
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    I like it, it's one of those, there is a glimmer of hope in the world style poems. Good rhyming scheme, it's simple, but it's effective, good pace to it, and even the pace itself suggest and upbeat nature to it. Cleverly written. "On the straight and narrow", easier said than done let me know how that works out for you. Well done, great write.

  • h202
    April 24, 2007

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    it's real simple, almost too simple for me, but i still like it. it flows well and you picked your words well.

    by the way, you're not really John Rhys Davies from the Indiana Jones movies are you?@??!??!?!?! sorry i just had to ask


  • Samplette gold member
    April 24, 2007

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    I think this is a great write. It is uplifting and full of hope. A possitive even in the negative. Very nice. I wish you the best in the contest.
    Sam


  • BabyBun silver member
    April 24, 2007

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    I enjoyed the simple message of hope contained in this poem. It has a real sense of movement about it with all the "keep on" lines. Great stuff. Stephanie x


  • Child of an Angel
    April 24, 2007

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    Hmmm. This isnt as complex as your other writes, but that isnt a bad thing at all. I think this is a good start to coming back. I think its time for your muse to come back from vacatio now dont you? What did you do to make her want to leave so long?
    lol
    Well, I am glad to see you back and trying. I still think the Devil on AP was the best thing ever written lol. Miss ya my friend!
    A&F
    Emily

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