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If my computer would work then I would tell you

fuck the world
fuck the net
anti-virus
is our safest bet

the keyboard is busted
the mouse is all tangeled
the monitor is blinking
my words are all mangled

ctrl, alt, delete!!!
ctrl, alt, delete!!!
comonsense in cyberspace
seems obsolete

internet explorer
firefox
screaming and hitting
this stupid box

error on page
page can not load
i'm going insane
my head's ganna explode

start, shutdown
turn off the tower
pressing the button
turn off the power

i've had enough
how does microsoft sell
fuck this shit
I'm getting a dell



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  • Aurora Ceres
    June 22, 2007
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    Love the technophobia category! The form and rhyme scheme you've used creates a fast meter, very smooth allowing for the frustrations, humor and point to come across to the reader very well. All in all, great job and enjoyable read! Thanks for the laugh!


  • grannyeri gold member
    June 21, 2007
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    Oh I like the fast talking flow of this piece, the brevity of the lines and the message this shares with us readers - think we have all been there at times - wanting to have things easier and programs that are userproof - that can correct themselves and us at the same time. LOL


  • BabyBun silver member
    June 20, 2007
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    Cool - I can feel the frustration! Good rhythm and really fun.


  • soulfultia gold member
    June 19, 2007

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    your humor is alive and well within the write, a collab at that...well both your humor is alive within it An intriguing and unique penning ~Tia


  • badddgirl
    June 17, 2007

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    ROFLMAO

    Ok now thats some funny ass shit!

    My husband builds computers and I hear these words often...

    the keyboard is busted
    the mouse is all tangeled
    the monitor is blinking
    my words are all mangled

    ctrl, alt, delete!!!
    ctrl, alt, delete!!!
    comonsense in cyberspace
    seems obsolete

    internet explorer
    firefox
    screaming and hitting
    this stupid box


    Then its time for me and the kids to take a ride.

  • touchet03
    May 13, 2007
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    lol I HAVE A DELL ..... great poem i love it


  • perfect relief
    May 4, 2007

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    I like it. Very funny...sad thing is that I could really see you doing this if you got mad enough. Awesome collab


  • Bonnie1023
    April 25, 2007
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    undoubtly we are alone in this...lol...I still think that our poem kicks ass and is very funny.

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