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raining sun

so many drops of acid sun
burning through my soul
i havent met the one i love
only black controls my soul
i become so god damn angry
more \and more each day
my belief in that i witch once believed
slowly etched away.
i cant sit around alone no more
i am driving myself mad
does it matter that i am even hear
if i left who would be sad/?

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i have had enough.

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  • iamlost gold member
    April 23, 2007

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    This poem seems as if it was written as one thought, as one emotion you had to get out. It is very beautiful in that way. I love the lines "so many drops of acid sun/ burning through my soul", this image works very well for me to convey the pain you seem to be feeling in this poem. Your author notes also intrigue me, but I'm not one for preaching in the comment box. I just think this is a beautiful poem of anger and hopelessness, and a person who wrote such a poem should hold on to life.