spread over the satin sheets
and eagerly awaiting my finesse.
it's in your hand right now,
Between two fingers you clasp it,
and my tongue licks the tip softly,
while you undulate to soprano sighs,
you split the pink silk wide
so that I can suckle your nub
swollen like a ju-ju-bead
it quivers as I blow on it warmly,
then slide my tongue deep up inside you,
curling like a comma,
touching that electric spot,
that locks your thighs around my ears,
blocking all sound but the wisp wisp
of me tonguing you in and out,
then I make slow figure eights
like a slice skater over your depths,
up around the hooded delight, and then
back to my nesting plunge,
in long wide laps,
up and down
tongue folded in your spit,
as you arch your back and thrash,
I'll hang on to your tiny saddle-horn,
lips pressed tight, tongue circling....
for those bucking seven heavenly seconds
it takes to make you my best ride ever.
then it'll be my turn to hitch up to you.
YeeeeeeHawwwww!!!
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Artis
Author notes
by Artis
A contest entry
- Public Places && Tangled Bed Sheets by bird-mad girl.
1200 points, ended May 19, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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you descriptions where beautiful. I never read a poem so vivid and beautiful about eating someone out. holy shit. this was amazing.
and the ending, priceless.
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WOW
I believe I am a bit flushed
and at a loss for words,
well done!
Michelle
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I love your erotica
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clever and funny
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Love rodeo so this nearly 8 second ride is a real winner. Very sensual with vivid visuals throughout these lines. Wonderful flow and a great ending. The next ride is coming up.
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As always, a perfect write. Good luck in the contest. Debby
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Very nice.
Great imagery, rhythm, and flow. I really liked this piece. The only thing that bothered me was how random the capitalizations were, and I'm not sure if that was intended, or disregarded. At any rate, good job. -
Artis,
Amazing write with a sensual and provocative flair that ignites the senses! YOW! Such hot passion!
Brilliant imagery and a most fab post!
Good luck to you!
LRD
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Oh wow oh wow oh wow.
Very vivid detail, great imagery...did i mentions GREAT imagery..holy cow man, woaaaa. This was very very well penned. Best of luck to you on this one.
Vsutton
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very descriptive
great write, very descriptive and sexual, the jioning of two in hot exchange of pleasure, great write(i've read books that say more)
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...............................damn
Lane
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