Unlock your sorrowful tears
let them flow like a raging river
From the depths of your being
howl like a wolfcub who has been
abandoned by his pack
Ask for the comfort you will
need in all the days to come
Keep that expression of sorrow
with you as long as you need to grieve
It will bend of it's own
accord when you are finished
Allow yourself the unhindered crying
your soul will require to heal
To make sense of things grasp your
spirituality as a way of sailing
far far away from the utter
horror of it all
Do not try to push those tears aside
as your pain and suffering is meaningful
though it does not feel that way now
Take those photo's from your wallets
and display them at will with
awesome love and abundant pride
Take them out as need be
and shower them with tears and memories
I promise you it will validate
their very existance
Know that the very waters of your
faith will certainly be tested
also know that this too shall pass
Your pain will remain forever but
your faith will return tenfold
Allow the light to pass over your
darkness and believe that one day
there will be healing
If you can find the strength within
you must allow for access back into
your hearts
For one day you will
feel entitled to open the gates that
have held you under seige
Because grief will never leave you
where it finds you...
Author notes
I certainly wish i had the power to have been able to change the outcome of this most horriffic day.
I wanted to honor all the lost and living souls of Virginia Tech.
(Quote)
Because grief will never leave you
where it finds you...
I read this in a book some time ago, but i do not remember where or who's quote it is.
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This was very good, it showed great meaning and represented the option you chose. Beautifully done and thank you for entering
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This is an awsome write thanks for the entery and good luck!
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That is such a beautiful peace. I'm sure if Virginia Tech read this they would be so grateful and happy that someone is there.
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This is such a lovely piece for the loved ones to the victims of the Virginia Tech Tragedy...I do agree with you that we must let our grief out in the open by letting those tears fall...for in the end there is healing...thank you for sharing this lovely write!
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Oof, this is a sad topic... but luckily, you made it very very pleasurable to read. Beautiful. Good job, and thank you for entering!
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very touching
I got some competition now!LOL!
Good luck in the contest!*
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"know that this too will pass
your pain will remain forever
but your faith will return ten-fold"...excellent and true,a great tribute with a great ending...excellent
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beautiful, thank you for entering.
whisper
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urafinalist!
good luck.
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WOW. Someone took the contest extremely seriously. This brought tears. It truly does justice to all of the victims of that horrible day. Bravo.
Best of luck and thanks for entering! -
This is really heartfelt and its really touching you have written a poem for the people affected by this tragedy. This fitted the contest really well. A line that really stood out for me was
Your pain will remain forever but
your faith will return tenfold
... it just made sense as was somthing I experienced after loosing someone very close to me.
Thankyou for your entry, and best of luck in my contest =]
Frankie xXx
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Thank you for subjecting yourself to my review. I think that you have penned a very nice tribute to the people that were lost at Virginia Tech. I am very curious as to why when there was a word beginning with L in the middle of a line, you capitalized it. Am I missing something here?
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This is a beautiful heartfelt tribute.... everyone needs to grieve in their own way. Wonderful write. Thank you for the entry in my contest.
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Well spoken thoughts of encouragementand support. Not sure what your ".." is suppose to represent? If its period leave it as one, if elipses then add a third (elipses are used for trailing off thoughts or an unspoken continuation). SOme of the gerunds could be excised to help tighten this up, also a few commas moved may help it read with a smoother delivery. A good occassional poem.
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Amen
a very powerful truth in all you have said.The loss is so tremendously felt around the world.Sorrows edge only seems to hold back the tears from shock.When at the end of the day all you can do is cry.
A blessing to have read this heartfelt piece
Good Luck in you contests
~Cheryl~
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Hm a nice piece, I can tell you feel as you write--Which is good.
Well communicated, and it fulfilled the criteria for the prompt you chose--
I'd play a bit with the syntax of stanzas 2 and 5, but it's nothing horrible, just not as well done as the other verses.
The only big problem I think is the quote at the end, the way you cited it "quote" and all interrupted the poem quite dramatically---I'd put the lines in quotes, then cite at the bottom in your author's notes--Not a difficult thing to fix.
Nicely written,
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We all have grieved and mourned for the VT students but more have not shed enough tears... But I suppose there wouldn't be enough tears in the world to compensate this loss. Thank you for entering my contest and sharing this heartfelt write with AP.
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