A mouse called Charlie came to dinner today,
as with each delivery of rotted food,
eating together and listening to distant tales,
stories told of a son and daughter and wife;
for each face’s memory is being replaced
by mud and water, pain and nightmares.
Time is lost within the struggle to survive,
hope lives but remains a secret grasp
reaching beyond the bamboo walls to places
only Charlie knows. Paths of imagination,
moments of escape become precious lifelines
cast out into freedom baiting sanity to remain.
Author notes
images:
http://www.dailymail.co.uk/pages/live/articles/news/news.html?in_article_id=496091&in_page_id=1770
Idle mind wondering
In a list
A contest entry
- Feeling Through A Filter Of Dusk by Crawl.
600 points, ended April 30, 2007, 4 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Wanna play in the paint bucket? by Dove.
525 points, ended May 4, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very gold worthy!
The comments below say it better than I do...as I sit here feeling the words settle in my solar plexis. The truth impacts hard, but its full effect on those who pass through the horrors of war, I can't begin to fathom.
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A very deep and emotional poem for some I am sure. My father was a captive way back when and told similar stories to this. The background is very fitting and unique, I wonder though if it may also look good in grey scale, or septa, like an old photo of sorts… Just a thought
A nice job on both and congrats on the gold you’ve received on it. Thank you for the entry and best wishes in the contest
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Powerful, haunting poem with a border/ background that enhances that power. This grips my soul and shakes it.
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Excellent poem And Great background congrats on Gold Good luck in Doves
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This IS excellence.
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This is truly an amazing poem and you did a wonderful job in coming up with this. You are a very talented poet and I do so look forward to reading more from you. Congratulations on winning the gold trophy on this piece. It was certainly deserved. Keep up the excellent work and may God bless you every day.
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Smiling
I am so happy you brough Charlie back. Excellent piece. ~Pamela 
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Congrats
GOLD YES!! Very good. Very very good. Glad to see it even though you need to (bring Charlie back)!
So pleased to see a trophy here dear one. It really deserved the honor and much more. ~Pam
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oh wow, everytime I read one of your poems I feel touched. you truly have a gift. excellent work. I like how you use subtle metaphors through out this one.
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Bravo! Standing in applause!
Oh my! This is so good. I am speechless. Simply speechless. Exceptional dear one. ~Pamela
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