Watch: can you see it stirring
The murky water 'round
Can't you see it slither
Though it makes no sound
I feel as though I can't stay here
That awful pulsating of dread
We must get out before it's too late
Or it's going to have my head
Author notes
It's not that great, but I gave it a try...
A contest entry
- Art on the Bayou (closes at midnight) by MuddyKing.
400 points, ended April 24, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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excellent take on my painting
peace Muddy
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Da Dum . . . Da Dum
Dear Felissa,
This was a wonderful poem - you did a great job using the picture for inspiration.
Good Luck in the contest!
Tang
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Very well done. You described the fear caused by the terror in the water. Good luck in the contest.
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I can't read this poem. YOu need to change the font to white, or switch the gree and black, or something... I hate having to highlight stuff to read it.
Ummmmm I really like the rhythm of this poem and all the rhythmic words you used. It gave the poem a very percussive feel. "Stirring." "'round" "Pulsating"
Great visual, too. I can even smell the murky water.
Good luck in this contest.
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