Princess Lonesome lives inside a castle on a hill,
The rooms are damp and dreary, they leave you with a chill,
The windows all have cobwebs and there never is fresh air,
She dances through the halls as if she didnt have a care.
She decided long ago that love was not for her,
Too many things can go wrong and you just can't be sure,
About the safety of your heart , so love she cast aside,
Along with memories of broken dreams and all the tears she cried.
Her money was her solace, and her status her best friend,
Too scared to risk a lover or her self made hell might end,
She spent her time pretending that her happiness was real,
She remembered how to smile, but had forgotten how to feel.
The years of living all alone without a soul who cared,
The long nights spent in solitude, the fears she never shared,
All took their toll on her poor mind 'til all hope slipped away,
And she locked herself behind those doors and stays there yet today...
Princess Lonesome gained her peace but lost her only chance,
To have someone to love her, and know the sweetness of romance,
So dance inside your hallways in your castle on that hill,
You never saw my love for you , and now you never will.
Rakerman
A contest entry
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Very nice write, thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
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whisper
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This poem was super good, I loved the rhyming. Thanks for entering!
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What can I say that I haven't said before, you know I love it already. I think I am going to stop for today and save myself something for tomorrow! Take care x
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awesome
this was pretty awesome.. i've read a few of your poems.. ur a pretty good writer... well nice poem.. it was good -
your writing never stops surprising me , wonderful poem , I loved every word of it, thanks for sharing .
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Oooooh, great write! LOL, I say the OOOoooooOOOh for the last line--didn't see that coming. It's kind of sassy. I love it! My two favorite parts are "About the safety of your heart, so love she cast aside, Along with .....tears she cried." and "She spent her time pretending.... but had forgotten how to feel." How did you come up with that? I'm in love with those ideas and you put them so exquisitely. Great great write! Thanks so much for sharing. Take care.
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Hello, This was a rather sad and heartfelt tale. I am sure alot of people wind up like her after being hurt over and over. You can only be hurt so many times.
A terrific write with great rhyme and flow. Thanks for sharing. Hope all is well. Take care, Sandy 
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Princess Lonesome
Sounds like a story my father use to tell me when I was growing up..has that old time feel to it like the songs that he loved so much to sing...That I too came to enjoy and still find myself singing them to my self....thank you for the read.. -
Fabulous
I really like this one. Great message with a lot of meaning.
Her money was her solace, and her status her best friend,
Too scared to risk a lover or her self made hell might end,
She spent her time pretending that her happiness was real,
She remembered how to smile, but had forgotten how to feel.
My favorite stanza. I like the last two lines of it most though. -
I feel I should go aaahhhhhhhhh.
A delightful poem but with a message. To gain love you have to give love and all the money and status can't buy happiness and you just end up lonely, but what of the poor writer, spurned, never seen for the love he held and now, alas never will be.
A very sad poem but I loved it.
Thanks for sharing...Sue
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Your own hell
A hell of your own... and the only way to escape is to dig your way out... good thing my spoon is made of chrome... lets get diggin!
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