Chips of guilt
Settle painfully
In my stomach
(original of course...
I needed the salt fix)
To cauterize the deal
Smashed, trashed and trashed
Cracks in the cement,
Broken patches in drywall
Anger, the untamed yet
Ravenous beast
Begot me and I in turn,
Chipped with guilt
Can see the damage
that’s by fault, mine
Author notes
another entry in a contest seeking a body and ending for a poem
A contest entry
- Guilt ... by Polaja.
700 points, ended May 23, 2007, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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i think i am even more losed but i like it, to you my friend i say keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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I love "cauterize the deal". Great image, visceral. Also pleased with the ending. So many write "poetic" screeds that seem to evade responsibility. I read something recently, the advice of some wise old man to a young poet. He said, " Automatically assume the poetry you read will be bad. You'll only be wrong one time in a hundred." The poem I read before this was number 99.
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yay it's always nice to be #100. sometimes you get a prize. this time you got the prize. hehe
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