I disected what was left of us/me?/you?
& found nothing left to hold on to
((Plastic pin ups never gave me much flare))
How shallow is that puddle that you relapse in?
Becasue when you're drowning there is not much motivating me to save you
[or.is.it.me?]
Star*lit eyes see a cellulite truth
that needs to be thrust under scrutiny
My stomach is rejecting(revolting/convulsing)
that new heart♥transpalnt
along with last week's menu....
Im throwing up the trash of our past,
NO matter how much glitter you dip it in,
It'll still be shit...
(I can taste it your kisses)
So much blood shed, so many tears fled
Phrosthetic cheeks, dont make great canvas's
So I can't paint my feelings for you to read.
Sorry I cant be that open book you wanted....
My acrylic tips are aching form draggin us out of these holes
&.& now we rip at the seams
(and we break so beautifully)
Our under-nourished stuffing comes spilling out
[[You know you want to be my teddy bear.]]
I wrote you a letter explaining my resignation...
but I marked out all the pen strokes
&& threw it away....
Author notes
Option 4
A contest entry
- Show Me Wot U Got!! (Options) by Crazy-Baby.
884 points, ended May 8, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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well done! your images are very capturing an your flow is perfect. I like the indecisivness created by doubling you words.
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"Phrosthetic cheeks, dont make great canvas's
So I can't paint my feelings for you to read.
Sorry I cant be that open book you wanted...."
very wise and very eminent!
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"& found nothing left to hold on to
((Plastic pin ups never gave me much flare))
How shallow is that puddle that you relapse in?
Becasue when you're drowning there is not much motivating me to save you"
Reminds Me Of Him.
"Star*lit eyes see a cellulite truth
that needs to be thrust under scrutiny
My stomach is rejecting(revolting/convulsing)
that new heart♥transpalnt
along with last week's menu"
Reminds Me Of Me.
"Our under-nourished stuffing comes spilling out;;; I wrote you a letter explaining my resignation...
but I marked out all the pen strokes
&& threw it away...."
WONDERFUL.
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I disected what was left of us/me?/you?
& found nothing left to hold on to
i love that.
reminds me of someone. -
I don't really get it...it was like the anatomy of a weird human being...interesting. It was still really well written though.
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wow this is really good, the more i read of it the more suckd into it i got. i really enjoyed it and felt ur emotion comming through strongly. thanx for entering x x x
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