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Still standing here

 

 

Weathers given no warning to this shed that stands,

once admired by its builder with just his two hands.

Time has aged the ground on which it now sits upon,

and her original owner... ~Has long since passed on!~

The rusted metal roof plays its tune of the raindrops,

while still able to store tools of the fields and crops.

The sun comes up every morning across its barn wall,

begining to show its age, but standing strong and tall.

Memories of "Hide-and-seek" have been played within,

by children in this town that now drive by with a grin.

Animals have found shelter in its walls from the cold,

and each piece of wood has a unique story to be told.

It has weathered storms, wind and even summer heat,

showing her proud memories by the side of this street.

 

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  • -Ink Artist-
    May 8, 2007

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    Such poignant memories you've shared within these lines, the "growing up" and "growing old" memories that are held within the walls of this old barn. This has such an effortless flow, it seems to just pour out from the heart. The ending line, showing pride in all this old barn has seen, is so beautifully written. A fabulous piece! Thanks for your entry!


    ~Lori

  • Ir.muse
    April 23, 2007

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    hi dear uncle,

    I haven't been here for a while and really missed your unfinished poems.
    Wish you luck.

    Shahrzad

  • Pietro456
    April 23, 2007

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    Short but Sweet !

    Sandy,
    I really like this poem. You have said what you have to say in a few lines. I just love the line, " Timehas aged the ground on which it stands upon. Whew ! I like it Keep up the great work.