I saw you yesterday, but you are no
longer here.
The pain strikes with every single tear.
I miss you every moment. There were no
goodbyes, you left me here alone.
The tears won't stop, pain strikes with every
single tear. Alone you left me here.
There were no goodbyes, you left this world
without a sound. The loss of you made my anger
reckless.
Life will go on, but mine will forever be at a
standstill.
The pain strikes through with every single tear.
Author notes
Skky Parker option 2
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well this isnt what i'm looking for i was mainly looking for what did this to you like what pain is this not i felt pain more like what kind of pain and so on. But great write! -
An interesting piece of sadness. The poem itself in text was very hard to read. Thank you for your entry!
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very good
but a little bit too repetitive
its a sad poem
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This poem is pretty sad, but its very repetitive. With such a short poem the repetativeness makes the poem seem out of place. It was pretty good though. I liked the overall theme of it. It sucks when someone leaves you and it leaves a hole in your heart where that person used to fill. And pain seems to be unrelenting.
Thank you for entering my contest.
Ashley -
A very piercing and poignant pome of deeply suffered loss and longing. Thanks for sharing this, and best of luck in the contest!
All the best,
David Michaels
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very sweet and moving and touching. i am speechless, and this is a very pleasant write. excellent job and good luck in the contest
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Thank you so much for this...
A beautiful poem, much appreciated! Your thoughts show much talent and heart! Thank you for sharing your wisdom in such a beautiful way.
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wonderfully written. Thank you for the comforting poetic words and thanks for adding your terrrific muse to my project. Good luck in the contest. Again, thank you for such comfort in my time of grief. Patti
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Very deep piece
Deep emotions here. Very very well-written indeed. I can feel the sadness and despair in every line here. A desolation pouring through every stanza. The feeling behind this is very powerful. Keep writing.
Wayne
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good luck in this contest and thanks for entering in memorance of my good friend James! I'm crying at the moment and if he was here he would laugh at me crying over a poem! but thanks i really like it a lot!
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Very emotional and sad write. The font color made it a lil hard to read but otherwise a very well done penning Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e *
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u bring out the emotion so well...and sorry i know its hard to loose someone i lost my uncle who was very dear to me on xmas eve. its hard but i know u would have plenty of good moments with them. x but great discription it made me cry!
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Awe
I am sorry hun... I know it is hard to lose someone dear to you. I have lost quite a few, and it hurts worse then any words can describe, but we have to be strong an live on without them, perhaps one day we will see them again. If there were words to describe the pain I think you did a good job! -
Wow....I..wow. good job! The emotion really showed, especially in the middle! Good job and keep writing!
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I was already crying before I read this, but it made me cry a little heavier. I could feel your pain and sadness from it in your work and so ... I'd like to say, it was great that you could cause that effect on someone. Emotions being one of the main reasons for poetry. Great write, thanks for entering, and good luck.
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wow this is emotional.i like it keep up the amazing work
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